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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels? v.1

Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels? v. 1
Non-renewable sources such as crude oil play a very important role in production of energy and power for the industries and transportation. Due to their over usage, these sources are close to depletion. This essay will discuss methods to save these resources from getting depleted and also suggest other methods. A major percentage of the non-renewable sources are used for transportation. To save these fuels, some methods like, promotion of the use of public transport and sharing the vehicles by the people travelling similar routes can be encouraged. For example, government of Delhi has made a rule of Odd and Even wherein, people can use their vehicles on specific allotted days depending upon their number plate being odd or even. Hence, this action encouraged increased use of metros and car-pooling among the people, thereby reducing the consumption of these resources. As these sources are non-renewable, other options such as, hydroelectricity and wind electricity for generation of power can be some excellent alternatives, as they are freely available and in ample amounts. Moreover, the production of energy from water and air does not produce any harmful gases that can cause air pollution. For instance, a recent study suggested that the generation of the power from water is a more economical and predictable process. Therefore, these alternative sources of energy show promising growth for the future. In conclusion, fossil fuels play a critical part in energy generation for industrial work and transportation. This essay discussed that, promoting the use of public transport and car-pooling can be some methods to save these resources. In addition, production of power from water and air are upcoming substitutes for depleting sources.
Non-renewable
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sources
such as crude oil play a
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very
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important
role in production of
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energy
and
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power
for the industries and transportation. Due to their over usage, these
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sources
are close to depletion. This essay will discuss methods to save these resources from getting depleted and
also
suggest other methods.

A major percentage of the non-renewable
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sources
are
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used
for transportation. To save these fuels,
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some
methods like, promotion of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transport and sharing the vehicles by the
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people
travelling similar routes can
be encouraged
.
For example
,
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government
of Delhi has made a
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rule
of Odd and Even wherein,
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people
can
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use
their vehicles on specific allotted days depending upon their number plate being odd or even.
Hence
, this action encouraged increased
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use
of metros and car-pooling among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, thereby reducing the consumption of these resources.

As these
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sources
are non-renewable, other options such as, hydroelectricity and wind electricity for generation of
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power
can be
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some
excellent alternatives, as they are
freely
available and in ample amounts.
Moreover
, the production of
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energy
from water and air does not produce any harmful gases that can cause air pollution.
For instance
, a recent study suggested that the generation of the
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power
from water is a more economical and predictable process.
Therefore
, these alternative
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sources
of
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energy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
promising growth for the future.

In conclusion
, fossil fuels play a critical part in
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energy
generation for industrial work and transportation. This essay discussed that, promoting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transport and car-pooling can be
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some
methods to save these resources.
In addition
, production of
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power
from water and air are upcoming substitutes for depleting
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sources
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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