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the internet has become so efficient and popular that many people rely on it for learning. some suggest that it could replace the use of books as the main source of knowledge for education. do you support or oppose the opinion? explain your position v.1

the internet has become so efficient and popular that many people rely on it for learning. some suggest that it could replace the use of books as the main source of knowledge for education. do you support or oppose the opinion? explain your position v. 1
It seems unusual, but true, that the internet is an inevitable factor in the present scenario. There has been ranging debates on this concern, while some individuals believe that the cyberspace has become more structured and popular that mass community confined in it for learning. Others opine that it could replace the utilize of academic materials as the main cause of acquaintance for education. However, I strongly agree that the internet has better opportunities of replacing written text as the primary source of knowledge. There are plenty of reasons why people rely on that the internet as advantageous. Firstly, the initial point of favour is convenience. Web sites, which are providing education resources - e - learning, virtual classrooms and vital facilities in study environments provides a different experience to juveniles beyond a traditional practice. Hence, the experience of learning is divergent from the books based education system and also a plethora of books and magazines are available on the internet free of cost. As a result of this, many academics now have decided to allow the disciples to browse the internet at the schools. Besides that, eBooks are very popular among the apprentice because of the ease of access and easy to share. On the other hand, one of the major problems confronting by the school children in the present is the lack of opportunities to gain additional knowledge as education is limited to academic materials. For an example, the information technology sector could be seen as an updated subject. Therefor, it is not possible to obtain new information related to the field of the reference of books and magazines related to that subject. But, the internet allows students to access that information properly and accurately. Besides, it may assist to ameliorate the literacy in technology. It strikes me that the internet has made it easy to find data in any relevant subject area; any information that we need is available at our fingertips. It has made the traditional sources of learning - academic materials redundant. There are obvious benefits to this; eBooks do not occupy space. They are much less expensive than printed books and can be shared with anyone within a fraction of seconds. To sum up, it is true that the internet has certainly replacing paper books and the sale of eBooks is soaring; however, substitute of e-technology is an advantage for future learners.
It seems unusual,
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but
true, that the internet is an inevitable factor in the present scenario. There has been ranging debates on this concern, while
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some
individuals believe that the cyberspace has become more structured and popular that mass community confined in it for
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learning
. Others opine that it could replace
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the utilize
of
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academic
materials as the main cause of acquaintance for
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education
.
However
, I
strongly
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agree
that the internet has better opportunities of replacing written text as the primary source of knowledge.

There are
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plenty
of reasons why
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people
rely on that the internet as advantageous.
Firstly
, the initial point of
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favour
is convenience.
Did you mean "Websites"?
Web sites
, which are providing
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education
resources
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-
e
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-
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learning
, virtual classrooms and vital facilities in study environments provides a
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different
experience to juveniles beyond a traditional practice.
Hence
, the experience of
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learning
is divergent from the
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books
based
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education
system and
also
a plethora of
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books
and magazines are available on the internet free of cost.
As a result
of this,
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many
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academics
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now
have decided to
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allow
the disciples to browse the internet at the schools.
Besides
that,
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eBooks
are
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very
popular among the apprentice
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because
of the
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ease
of access and easy to share.

On the other hand
, one of the major problems confronting by the school children in the present is the lack of opportunities to gain additional knowledge as
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education
is limited
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
academic
materials. For an example, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
technology sector could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
as an updated subject. Therefor, it is not possible to obtain new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
related to the field of the reference of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and magazines related to that subject.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, the internet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
students to access that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
properly
and
accurately
.
Besides
, it may assist to ameliorate the literacy in technology.

It strikes me that the internet has made it easy to find data in any relevant subject area; any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
that we need is available at our fingertips. It has made the traditional sources of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
academic
materials redundant. There are obvious benefits to this;
Possible spelling mistake found.
eBooks
do not occupy space. They are much less expensive than printed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and can
be shared
with anyone within a fraction of seconds.

To sum up, it is true that the internet has
certainly
replacing paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and the sale of
Possible spelling mistake found.
eBooks
is soaring;
however
, substitute of e-technology is an advantage for future learners.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay the internet has become so efficient and popular that many people rely on it for learning. some suggest that it could replace the use of books as the main source of knowledge for education. do you support or oppose the opinion? explain your position v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
398 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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