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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. v. 1
The airline has its popularity significantly risen in the transmission of many nations' fruits and vegetable industry, and especially used to deliver to areas lacking of these products. While many people find this usage of aircraft reasonable, others suggests that this means of delivering is unnecessary. My essay will explain why many encourage this tendency and some believe that there are other methods that are also more relevant for transference. Airliners are known for its incredible speed of commuting from one point to another, which can be utilized in not only for human's travelling but also for transporting goods and cargoes. This means that when an area or region has to suffer from famine or weather that is unsuitable for their crops, transmission by air would be the most appropriate method to tackle the problem. Additionally, many countries like the United Nation, China, and Russia have numerous airlines only for exchanging and exporting products. For instance, in China only, where various kinds of weather can be found, spends less attention on agricultural issues due to the convenience of an aircraft that contributes a remarkable part in solving these concerns. Advantageous as the airline are, the airline itself, require tonnes of fuel like coal, oil, gas to activate the engines. Therefore, this is the main reason why many people reject using aircraft as a means of transportation regardless of its favourable attributes. A research at the environmental institute in California shows that 27% of the carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere, affecting the air quality of numerous countries are what airline are responsible for. This immense amount of toxic chemical substances emitted into the air is what needs to be concerned more than famine and crop losses. In general, although airline makes a good transportation, does not mean that it should be overused. Otherwise, the world will have to face more serious environmental problems in the next decade leading to much more significant consequences.
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significantly
risen in the transmission of
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nations' fruits and vegetable industry, and
especially
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used
to deliver to areas lacking of these products. While
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many
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people
find this usage of aircraft reasonable, others suggests that this
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means
of delivering is unnecessary. My essay will
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explain
why
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many
encourage this tendency and
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some
believe that there are other methods that are
also
more relevant for transference.

Airliners
are known
for its incredible speed of commuting from one point to another, which can
be utilized
in not
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only
for human's travelling
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but
also
for transporting
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goods
and cargoes. This
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means
that when an area or region
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has to
suffer from famine or weather
that is
unsuitable for their crops, transmission by air would be the most appropriate method to tackle the problem.
Additionally
,
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many
countries like the United Nation, China, and Russia have numerous airlines
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only
for exchanging and exporting products.
For instance
, in China
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only
, where various kinds of weather can
be found
, spends less attention on agricultural issues due to the convenience of an aircraft that contributes a remarkable part in solving these concerns.

Advantageous as the airline are, the airline itself, require tonnes of fuel like coal, oil, gas to activate the engines.
Therefore
, this is the main reason why
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many
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people
reject using aircraft as a
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means
of transportation regardless of its
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favourable
attributes.
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A research
at the environmental institute in California
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shows
that 27% of the carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere, affecting the air quality of numerous countries are what airline are responsible for. This immense amount of toxic chemical substances emitted into the air is what needs to
be concerned
more than famine and crop losses.

In general
, although airline
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makes
a
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good
transportation, does not
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mean
that it should
be overused
.
Otherwise
, the world will
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have to
face more serious environmental problems in the
next
decade leading to much more significant consequences.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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