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aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. some people consider it a good trend but some people oppose it. discuss both views and give your own opinion v.3

aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. some people consider it a good trend but some people oppose it. 3
Aircraft transportation plays a vital role in modern life. Many believe that it is very beneficial. On the flip side, some say it is unnecessary and extravagant. The present essay seeks to discuss the advantages of aircraft transportation is emulate its disadvantages. It often suggests that aircraft transportation is meritorious for two main reasons. For one thing, the market price is less likely to be influenced by seasonal factors. It can bring an adequate intake of nutrition for the general population throughout the year. Another thing is that exportation is one of the most critical parts of the national economy. As an illustration, besides all of the jobs that it can create, it plows back money to the country for selling unwilling products. By contrast, there are several disadvantages to aircraft transportation. In the first place, many people say perishable goods are not suitable for transporting. In recent years with dramatic advances in technology, make it easier to preserve fresh fruits and vegetables over a long haul air flight. In the second place, another popular belief is that a country that imports goods from other countries do not necessarily suffer from a loss. As things stand right now, import and export usually go hand in hand or trade is not unilateral but bilateral. By comparing and contrasting the positive and negative aspects of aircraft transportation, I believe that its upside is significantly more critical than its downside. To support my position, I would like to offer two primary arguments. Firstly, Doctor Riley, the well-versed head of the agricultural department of Oxford University, asserts that there is no need to increase our yields for eradicating hunger from the earth. Just need to stop putting our crops into belies of cattle and hands of dictators. Some times human problems required rational solutions. Secondly, the latest figures released by The World Health Organization (WHO) reflect that about five percent of the global population suffers from vitamin deficiency. In other words, aircraft transportation helps people much more than we think it does. In conclusion, it can be stated that its advantage of aircraft transportation is more than its disadvantages. Nevertheless, the question is: Can it improve the health and happiness of human beings in general? Only time will tell, but in the meantime, aircraft transportation will continue to influence every aspect of our every day lives.
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Aircraft
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transportation
plays a vital role in modern life.
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Many
believe that it is
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very
beneficial. On the flip side,
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some
say it is unnecessary and extravagant. The present essay seeks to discuss the advantages of
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aircraft
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transportation
is
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emulate
its disadvantages.

It
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often
suggests that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aircraft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
is meritorious for two main reasons. For one thing, the market price is less likely to
be influenced
by seasonal factors. It can bring an adequate intake of nutrition for the general population throughout the year. Another thing is that exportation is one of the most critical parts of the national economy. As an illustration,
besides
Consider using "all the".
all of the
jobs that it can create, it plows back money to the country for selling unwilling products.

By contrast, there are several disadvantages to
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aircraft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
. In the
first
place,
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many
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people
say perishable
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goods
are not suitable for transporting. In recent years with dramatic advances in technology,
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make
it easier to preserve fresh fruits and vegetables over a long haul air flight.
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In
the second place, another popular belief is that a country that imports
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
from other countries do not
necessarily
suffer from a loss. As things stand right
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now
, import and export
usually
go hand in hand or trade is not unilateral
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but
bilateral.

By comparing and contrasting the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aircraft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
, I believe that its upside is
significantly
more critical than its downside. To support my position, I would like to offer two primary arguments.
Firstly
, Doctor Riley, the well-versed head of the agricultural department of Oxford University, asserts that there is no need to increase our yields for eradicating hunger from the earth.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Just
need to
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stop
putting our crops into belies of cattle and hands of dictators.
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Some
times human problems required rational solutions.
Secondly
, the latest figures released by The World Health Organization (WHO) reflect that about five percent of the global population suffers from vitamin deficiency.
In other words
,
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aircraft
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
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helps
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people
much more than we
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think
it does.

In conclusion
, it can
be stated
that its advantage of
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aircraft
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transportation
is more than its disadvantages.
Nevertheless
, the question is: Can it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the health and happiness of human beings
in general
?
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Only
time will
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tell
,
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but
in the meantime,
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aircraft
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transportation
will continue to influence every aspect of our every day
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lives
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. some people consider it a good trend but some people oppose it. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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