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aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. some people consider it a good trend but some people oppose it. discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. some people consider it a good trend but some people oppose it. 1
Today, an increasing number of people believe that only the authorities and large firms play an important role in protecting the environment. Personally, I disagree with this viewpoint since anyone from all over the world could also do it effectively. It is important to consider that government and businesses could certainly make efforts to enhance the nature. By introducing regulations and imposing pecuniary fines and other severe punishments, the authorities are able to prevent those deliberately causing harm to the surroundings. For instance, Singapore, the cleanest city in the world, achieves its reputation as a result of harsh penalties against litterbugs. Furthermore, environment protection should be considered by businesses as a part of their corporate culture. Instead of placing profit on top priority, they had better produce environmentally friendly products and invest in advanced waste treatment systems, which reduces a large amount of untreated waste released to the environment. That is not to say that individuals do not pay a role in these issues. Household waste accounts for a significant proportion of the total waste discharged into the environment. In fact, on average, each person releases approximately 1. 8 kilograms of waste on a daily basis. Should each person be conscious of and capable of controling the amount of garbage dumped, the whole society can go green. In addition, by taking public transport rather than driving, people are able to limit the principal emissions from vehicles that lead to global warming. Clearly, the less cars are used on the roads by citizens, the less greenhouse gases such as CO2, CO, SO2 are released into the air. In conclusion, although the authorities and profit-oriented organization could play a part in protecting the environment, I believe individuals are also likely to look after it.
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Today
, an increasing number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the authorities and large firms play an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
Personally
, I disagree with this viewpoint since anyone from all over the world could
also
do it
effectively
.

It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to consider that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and businesses could
certainly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
efforts to enhance the nature. By introducing regulations and imposing pecuniary fines and other severe punishments, the authorities are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
those
deliberately
causing harm to the surroundings.
For instance
, Singapore, the cleanest city in the world, achieves its reputation
as a result
of harsh penalties against litterbugs.
Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
protection should
be considered
by businesses as a part of their corporate culture.
Instead
of placing profit on top priority, they had better produce
environmentally
friendly products and invest in advanced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
treatment systems, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
a large amount of untreated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
released to the environment.

That is
not to say that individuals do not pay a role in these issues. Household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
accounts for a significant proportion of the total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
discharged into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. In fact, on average, each person releases approximately 1. 8 kilograms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
on a daily basis. Should each person be conscious of and capable of
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controling
the amount of garbage dumped, the whole society can go green.
In addition
, by taking public transport
rather
than driving,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are able to limit the principal emissions from vehicles that lead to global warming.
Clearly
, the
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun cars is countable.
less
cars are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
on the roads by citizens, the less greenhouse gases such as CO2, CO, SO2
are released
into the air.

In conclusion
, although the authorities and profit-oriented organization could play a part in protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, I believe individuals are
also
likely to look after it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. some people consider it a good trend but some people oppose it. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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