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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown are or out of season. Some people think this is a positive development, but others believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified v.2

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown are or out of season. Some people think this is a positive development, but others believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified v. 2
There has been increasing in the demand of import throughout the world in recent years, including those perishable item such as fruits and vegetables. Some faction of people argue that it is beneficial for those country who are impoverished in agriculture products while it has some negative aspect that it is unnecessary. I will try to throw light upon both views with contain their perception. Also, I will try to posit my view about it. To commence with, there are multifarious evidence to shore those people who are in favor of it is the best way to import the crop from another countries. First and foremost, the conspicuous advantage is people get aware from foreign fruit and vegetable. To justify, crops from one countries has been imported to another countries. Since, people who are rely on only domestic products, they are more likely to taste another exotic fruits and vegetable that are fueled with enough vitamin and nutrients. The another predominant reason that scanty of food has been decreased due to imported agricultural products. To explain, people who can not be able to grow up the crops because of the bad climate or scarcity of water then it led to provide adequate crops which are not produced by pesticides. On the other side of spectrum, there are several advocate to oppose this perspective. From the my side, firstly, people have to face the inflation due to import. In addition, government try to cater all the necessity such as fruits and vegetable by purchasing that product from other countries which are transferred by air travels due to this mode of transport, price of oil would be reached at peck as well as the cost of product explicitly available at high price. Hence, people might be struggle with this problem as they have vegetable or fruit shortage. Apart from this perception, people are opposed with this idea which lead to decrease in usage of domestic product and dwellers of imported countries divert their mentality to foreign food that they are rich with all nutrients. Aggelomerating, all the points I elaborated an above that can be concluded that transport through air travels is beneficial as they fulfilled the requirement in just a few days despite having benefits it has negative aspect likewise people consume that fruits and vegetable which incline towards the decline in cultivating the crops. That is why I support that both view has positive as well as negative effects. Thereby, it is more fruitful in my opinion.
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.
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argue that it is beneficial for those
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country
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who
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products
while it has
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aspect that it is unnecessary. I will try to throw light upon both views with contain their perception.
Also
, I will try to posit my view about it.

To commence with, there are multifarious evidence to shore those
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people
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who
are in favor of it is the best way to import the
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crop
from another
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countries
.
First
and foremost, the conspicuous advantage is
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people
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get
aware from foreign
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fruit
and
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vegetable
. To justify,
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crops
from one
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countries
has
been imported
to another
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countries
. Since,
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people
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who
are
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domestic
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products
, they are more likely to taste another exotic
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fruits
and
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vegetable
that
are fueled
with
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enough
vitamin and nutrients. The another predominant reason that scanty of food has
been decreased
due to imported agricultural
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products
. To
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explain
,
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people
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who
can not be able to grow up the
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crops
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because
of the
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bad
climate or scarcity of water then it led to provide adequate
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crops
which are not produced by pesticides.

On the other side of spectrum, there are several
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to oppose this perspective. From
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,
firstly
,
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people
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have to
face the inflation due to import.
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,
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government
try to cater all the necessity such as
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fruits
and
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vegetable
by purchasing that
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product
from other
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countries
which
are transferred
by air travels due to this mode of transport, price of oil would
be reached
at peck
as well
as the cost of
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product
explicitly
available at high price.
Hence
,
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people
might be
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struggle
with this problem as they have
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vegetable
or
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fruit
shortage. Apart from this perception,
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people
are opposed
with this
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idea
which lead to decrease in usage of domestic
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product
and dwellers of imported
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countries
divert their mentality to foreign food that they are rich with all nutrients.

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Aggelomerating
, all the points I elaborated an above that can
be concluded
that transport through air travels is beneficial as they fulfilled the requirement in
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just
a few days despite having benefits it has
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negative
aspect
likewise
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people
consume that
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fruits
and
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vegetable
which incline towards the decline in cultivating the
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crops
.
That is
why I support that both view has
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positive
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as well as
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effects. Thereby, it is more fruitful in my opinion.
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IELTS essay Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown are or out of season. Some people think this is a positive development, but others believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
417 words
5.5
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