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Air pollution is one of the largest problems facing the world today. What are its causes and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem? v.1

Air pollution is one of the largest problems facing the world today. What are its causes and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem? v. 1
Global warming has become a serious concern for many countries, one of the widely faced issues relates to that of air pollution. This essay will discuss the reasons of air pollution which largely involves increasing number of vehicles and effects of industrialization. It will also provide some plausible solutions to such problems including improved public transportation and enforcement of industry laws. To begin with, air pollution have become an increasingly hazardous problem over the past few years. Although, there are several factors which contributes to this problem, foremost is the massive increase in number of private motor vehicles emitting smoke into the air. One of the main reasons behind this trend is inefficiency of public transportation system which is driving force for public to purchase and drive their own vehicles. For example, one will be left with no other option but to purchase one’s own car when one does not find a solution to commute between office and home through public conveyance. Moreover, in addition to that powerplants being operated on fossil fuels emit high pollutants into the air. Research suggests that more than 50% of the air pollution is caused by heavy industries. Therefore, private vehicles and industries are considered as one of the major contributors in air pollution. Nevertheless, there are also numerous solutions to these problems. However, an improved public commute system can play an important role in reduction of private transport means such as cars and motor bikes. For instance, if one is able to reach a destination in less time and cost as compared to going on a private motor vehicle, one will prefer public transport over private and hence, there will be drastic reduction in private cars. Consequently, emission of carbon dioxide will also be reduced. Furthermore, strict environmental laws can be enforced on industries by regulatory bodies. To illustrate, a sizeable plantation can be made mandatory for all industries depending on their size so that effected greenhouse environment can be compensated in terms of increased number of trees. To conclude, in today’s fast paced and industrialized world, more and more air is being polluted. This essay discussed how air pollution is often caused by private vehicles & powerplants and also provided with conceivable solutions.
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air
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pollution
. This essay will discuss the reasons of
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air
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pollution
which
largely
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vehicles
and effects of industrialization. It will
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improved
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public
transportation and enforcement of
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industry
laws.

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air
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pollution
have become an
increasingly
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problem
over the past few years. Although, there are several factors which contributes to this
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problem
, foremost is the massive increase in number of
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private
motor
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vehicles
emitting smoke into the
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air
. One of the main reasons behind this trend is inefficiency of
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public
transportation system which is driving force for
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public
to
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purchase
and drive their
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left
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solution
to commute between office and home through
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public
conveyance.
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,
in addition
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powerplants
being operated
on fossil fuels emit high pollutants into the
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air
. Research suggests that more than 50% of the
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air
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pollution
is caused
by heavy
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industries
.
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,
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private
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vehicles
and
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industries
are considered
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air
pollution.

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commute system can play an
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important
role in reduction of
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private
transport means such as cars and motor bikes.
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, if one is able to reach a destination in less time and cost as compared to going on a
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private
motor
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vehicle
, one will prefer
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public
transport over
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private
and
hence
, there will be drastic reduction in
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private
cars.
Consequently
, emission of carbon dioxide will
also
be
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reduced
.
Furthermore
, strict environmental laws can
be enforced
on
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industries
by regulatory bodies. To illustrate, a sizeable plantation can
be made
mandatory for all
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industries
depending on their size
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so
that effected greenhouse environment can
be compensated
in terms of increased number of trees.

To conclude
, in
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fast
paced and industrialized world, more and more
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is
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air
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pollution
is
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private
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vehicles
&
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powerplants
and
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46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Air pollution is one of the largest problems facing the world today. What are its causes and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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