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Agree or disagree: your friends are the most important influence in your life. Explain your idea v.1

Agree or disagree: your friends are the most important influence in your life. Explain your idea v. 1
In today's global world, Education is the most momentous thing in an individual life. Most precious years of our life have been spent in getting education. To reap the benefits of it some students prefer to study in different cities far from home, while others get an education from the neighbourhood. In my opinion the advantages of studying away from the family are dominating than its negatives. In today's fast growing cities many skills for living needs to be learned from the present sprouting generation. Get education distant from home gives the opportunity to learn such skills. For instance, money and time management, cooking, cleaning and how all these things can be managed with our daily studies when the responsible person is far-away. Such skills in overall development. Another important domain for getting an education near to the university is the surrounding atmosphere, which is full of other pupils helps to encourage for to do the hard work. Other than that the opportunities of mixing with people from different background give the chance to develop maturity and several qualities or skills also can be learned from this, which leads towards a successful life. However, living away from home can be emotionally depressing for some students, as a consequence, they are not able to concentrate on study. On the other hand, studying in homeland can be helpful in saving money due to dorms and hostels could be more expensive. Moreover, older person or caretaker in surroundings can be favouring while studying, which helps to concentrate more on study rather than other responsibilities. In contrast disturbing neighbourhood and siblings can be injurious while learning. In addition, the shadow of a responsible person in surrounding could prevent a person from self development and maturity. To recapitulate, although the disadvantages such as emotional breakdown, the advantages of independence and self development are more significant. According to the above argument, I can be agreed that advantages of studying far from home are overwhelming.
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today
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Education
is the most momentous thing in an individual life. Most precious years of our life have
been spent
in getting
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education
. To reap the benefits of it
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some
students prefer to study in
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different
cities far from home, while others
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get
an
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education
from the
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neighbourhood
. In my opinion the advantages of
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studying
away from the family are dominating than its negatives.

In
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today
's
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fast
growing cities
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many
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skills
for living needs to
be learned
from the present sprouting generation.
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Get
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education
distant from home gives the opportunity to learn such
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skills
.
For instance
, money and time management, cooking, cleaning and how all these things can
be managed
with our daily studies when the responsible
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person
is far-away. Such
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skills
in
overall
development. Another
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important
domain for getting an
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education
near to the university is the surrounding atmosphere, which is full of
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other
pupils
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helps
to encourage for to do the
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hard
work.
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Other
than that the opportunities of mixing with
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people
from
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different
background give the chance to develop maturity and several qualities or
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skills
also
can
be learned
from this, which leads towards a successful life.
However
, living away from home can be
emotionally
depressing for
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some
students, as a consequence, they are not able to concentrate on study.

On the
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other
hand,
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studying
in homeland can be helpful in saving money due to dorms and hostels could be more expensive.
Moreover
, older
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person
or caretaker in surroundings can be
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favouring
while
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studying
, which
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helps
to concentrate more on study
rather
than
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other
responsibilities. In
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contrast
disturbing
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neighbourhood
and siblings can be injurious while learning.
In addition
, the shadow of a responsible
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person
in surrounding could
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prevent
a
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person
from self development and maturity.

To recapitulate, although the disadvantages such as emotional breakdown, the advantages of independence and self development are more significant. According to the above argument, I can be
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agreed
that advantages of
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studying
far from home are overwhelming.
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IELTS essay Agree or disagree: your friends are the most important influence in your life. Explain your idea v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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