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People natural resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

People natural resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
The tourism industry plays a significant role to enhance the economy of the nation. But, because of the advancement in technology, an army of people believes that the cross-border tourism industry creates problems rather than understanding between people from different cultures. This essay will discuss why this industry helps the individual to learn about different cultures and did not create any kind of problem between peoples. To begin with, because of this industry, the foreigner can easily learn the culture of a particular nation. Many spectators come to a different country to cherish their players, and they meet the local peoples, who belong to a different region. Additionally, they learn things from them and also try local food and attire over there. For example, in the year 2010, to promote tourism, and to help local businesses, the Indian government, lower down the price of visas for the nation China and Japan. So, it helps to strengthen the bond between the two nations. Secondly, it is the biggest industry in the world, and it helps to boost the economy of the nation. No doubt, because of the language barrier, sometimes it's difficult for the local community to understand their language, and this may create conflicts between the two cultures. Moreover, sometimes foreigners also try to damage the historic building of the nation, where they visited, and this may create tension between the two. For instance, in the year 2005, in a World Cup match, the Indian audience damaged the stadium because India lost this match and this created problems between the two nations. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, no doubt the Tourism industry is the biggest, but it also creates misunderstanding between the two nations. We can easily overcome this by taking suitable steps. So, I firmly agree with this notion.
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of the advancement in technology, an army of
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people
believes that the cross-border
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tourism
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industry
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creates
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rather
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people
from
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different
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cultures
. This essay will discuss why this
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industry
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helps
the individual to learn about
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different
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cultures
and did not
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create
any kind of problem between peoples.

To
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begin
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because of this
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industry
, the foreigner can
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learn the
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culture
of a particular
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nation
.
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spectators
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come
to a
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different
country to cherish their players, and they
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meet
the
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local
peoples, who belong to a
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different
region.
Additionally
, they learn things from them and
also
try
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local
food and attire over there.
For example
, in the year 2010, to promote
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tourism
, and to
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help
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local
businesses, the Indian
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government
, lower down the price of visas for the
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nation
China and Japan.
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So
, it
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helps
to strengthen the bond between the two nations.

Secondly
, it is the biggest
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industry
in the world, and it
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helps
to boost the economy of the
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nation
. No doubt,
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because
of the language barrier,
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sometimes
it's difficult for the
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local
community to understand their language, and this may
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create
conflicts between the two
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cultures
.
Moreover
,
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sometimes
foreigners
also
try to damage the historic building of the
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nation
, where they visited, and this may
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create
tension between the two.
For instance
, in the year 2005, in a World Cup match, the Indian audience damaged the stadium
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because
India lost this match and this created problems between the two nations.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, no doubt the
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Tourism
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industry
is the biggest,
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but
it
also
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creates
misunderstanding between the two
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nations
. We can
easily
overcome this by taking suitable steps.
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So
, I
firmly
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agree
with this notion.
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IELTS essay People natural resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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