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Agree or disagree? The rules that society today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. v.1

Agree or disagree? The rules that society today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. v. 1
-These days, many countries are developing because of this item they produce products and build constructions. These conditions can lead to bad reasons. In this essay I will discuss about this dilemma. And I will try to give some examples on how we can prevent of this riddle. The main reason of declining quality of breath, and rain is that the injurious smoke of mills and factories. Actually, It has a bad influence of the breeze. For example, most industrialized countries - China's air is so much ruined because of industry. In other words the economy of some countries is running from industry and producing. The solution of this problem is that governments should decrease the producing and building constructions for several times. Take something the same complication of the world Coronavirus is influenced firstly to Chine. But some scientists believe that Coronavirus has a good side suitable for wind. The air of Chine was cleaned. At last the slowing down producing is helping to clean the wind. The next huge problem with declining quality of drink. The rain is our life source. One of the main causes of obstruction water is throwing out huge amount of harmful pollutants to drink. For example, many factories and mills have not any idea where put the spoilages. And some of them, especially dishonest throw out it into valuable rain. In other words, this this pollutant contains a lot of different elements that ruined from chemical elements. The solution is governments should increase of safety, ecology and must criminal responsibility such kind of people. As a result more people will be avoid from throwing harmful pollutants into water.
-These days,
many
countries are developing
because of this
item they produce products and build constructions. These conditions can lead to
bad
reasons. In this essay I will
discuss about this
dilemma. And I will try to give
some
examples on how we can
prevent
of this riddle.

The main reason of declining quality of breath, and rain is that the injurious smoke of mills and factories. Actually, It has a
bad
influence of the breeze.
For example
, most industrialized countries
-
China's air is
so
much ruined
because
of industry.
In other words
the economy of
some
countries is running from industry and producing. The solution of this problem is that
governments
should decrease the producing and building constructions for several times. Take something the same complication of the world Coronavirus
is influenced
firstly
to Chine.
But
some
scientists believe that Coronavirus has a
good
side suitable for wind. The air of Chine
was cleaned
. At last the slowing down producing is helping to clean the wind.

The
next
huge problem with declining quality of drink. The rain is our life source. One of the main causes of obstruction water is throwing out huge amount of harmful pollutants to drink.
For example
,
many
factories and mills have not any
idea
where put the
spoilages
. And
some
of them,
especially
dishonest throw out it into valuable rain.
In other words
,
this this
pollutant contains
a lot of
different
elements that ruined from chemical elements.

The solution is
governments
should increase of safety, ecology and
must
criminal responsibility such kind of
people
.
As
a result more
people
will be
avoid
from throwing harmful pollutants into water.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Agree or disagree? The rules that society today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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