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Companies should encourage employees who work in a high position to leave at the age of 55 in order to give opportunities to the new generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.5

Companies should encourage employees who work in a high position to leave at the age of 55 in order to give opportunities to the new generation. with this opinion? v. 5
Some specialists are of the opinion that kids should start learning a foreign language at the elementary school than when they are in high school. In my opinion, the merits of this, is more significant than the demerits. This essay will highlight both the advantages and the disadvantages. There are two main advantages to learning a foreign language early in life. The first is the ease of learning. At a young age, a juvenile's brain is still developing; hence the youngster is able to learn languages faster as opposed to learning later. The second advantage is more opportunities. The earlier a juvenile start learning a non-native language; the earlier they will start enjoying the benefits that comes with it and get more opportunities in life. For instance, a friend of mine who learnt French in elementary school had the opportunity to go on a sponsored trip to France meant for institute pupils only, while people who learnt this language later in life missed this opportunity. There are two main disadvantages to learn a foreign speech in during the early stage of a juvenile's life. The first is poor communication. Most time, the foreign language being learnt is not the main language of communication used with the child, resulting in learning multiple languages at the same time; consequently, the child might end up mixing up languages in a sentence leading to bad communication. For instance, when my sister was 3 years, she was learning Yoruba, English and French in school. Sometimes, she said vocabularies from these three languages in a sentence, resulting in mis-communication, which continued until she stopped learning one of the three languages. Furthermore, another disadvantage is jammed curriculum. The learning of a non-native speech might lead to the school’s curriculum of a child to be too tight such that the kid will be unable to engage in other activities such as afternoon siesta, game playing which is relevant as well. In conclusion, some specialists believe that children are better off learning a non-native vocabulary while in primary school than in high academy. This essay discussed the advantages and the disadvantages
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than when they are in high
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. In my opinion, the merits of this, is more significant than the demerits. This essay will highlight both the
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advantages
and the disadvantages.

There are two main
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advantages
to
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learning
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early in
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life
. The
first
is the
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of
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. At a young age, a juvenile's brain is
still
developing;
hence
the youngster is able to learn
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languages
faster as opposed to
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learning
later. The second
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advantage
is more opportunities. The earlier a juvenile
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a non-native
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; the earlier they will
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enjoying the benefits that
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, a friend of mine who
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French in elementary
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had the opportunity to go on a sponsored trip to France meant for institute pupils
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language
later in
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missed this opportunity.

There are two main disadvantages to learn a
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foreign
speech in during the early stage of a juvenile's
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life
. The
first
is poor communication. Most time, the
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foreign
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language
being
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is not the main
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language
of communication
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used
with the child, resulting in
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learning
multiple
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languages
at the same time;
consequently
, the child might
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up mixing up
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languages
in a sentence leading to
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bad
communication.
For instance
, when my sister was 3 years, she was
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learning
Yoruba, English and French in
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school
.
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, she said vocabularies from these three
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languages
in a sentence, resulting in
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mis-communication
, which continued until she
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stopped
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one of the three
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languages
.
Furthermore
, another disadvantage
is jammed
curriculum. The
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learning
of a non-native speech might lead to the
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curriculum of a child to be too tight such that the kid will be unable to engage in other activities such as afternoon siesta, game playing which is relevant
as well
.

In conclusion
,
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specialists believe that children are better off
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learning
a non-native vocabulary while in primary
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school
than in high academy. This essay discussed the
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advantages
and the
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disadvantages
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Do you know what a foreign accent is? It’s a sign of bravery.
Amy Chua

IELTS essay Companies should encourage employees who work in a high position to leave at the age of 55 in order to give opportunities to the new generation. with this opinion? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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