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Agree or disagree? Nowadays it is not important for people to have regularly family meals together. v.1

Agree or disagree? Nowadays it is not important for people to have regularly family meals together. v. 1
Reading books on electronic devices such as tablets and smart phones is becoming increasingly popular. On the one hand, some feel that this change is a positive one, but on the other hand, people see this as a negative development. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages associated with this trend. The biggest advantage of eBooks is that they can be stored and carried around easily/conveniently. Thousands of e-books can be stored on electronic devices such as tablets and smartphones which are no bigger than the size of your palm and therefore, people can carry their entire library with them wherever they go. A survey by the New York Times reported that more than 70 percent of the University students prefer e-books as they can now carry a single device containing an array of digital books in their pockets instead of a huge backpack filled with paper / hardcover books. On the flip side, people feel that the over-reliance on electronic devices for reading puts a strain on the reader’s eyes. This is because tablets and smartphones emit blue light from their screens which causes stress and irritation to the eyes upon prolonged exposure. Ophthalmologists have found that more than half of the patients who visit them face issues with their eyesight primarily due to the excessive usage of electronic devices for reading purpose. Therefore, people need to take precaution while relying on reading books on their gadgets. Also, software glitches or a weak battery can make these devices useless and reading impossible. Since this can happen at the most inopportune times, it is not safe to rely on eBooks alone. To conclude, the major benefit of e-books is the convenience of carrying a vast number of files on a single device that people can access anywhere. Despite the advantages of this trend, it has the drawback of affecting the reader’s eyesight. Also, any problem with the eBook reader can make the books inaccessible.
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some
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one,
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development. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages associated with this trend.

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eBooks
is that they can
be stored
and carried around
easily
/
conveniently
. Thousands of e-books can
be stored
on
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electronic
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devices
such as tablets and smartphones which are no bigger than the size of your palm and
therefore
,
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people
can carry their entire library with them wherever they go. A survey by the New York Times reported that more than 70 percent of the University students prefer e-books as they can
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now
carry a single
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device
containing an array of digital
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books
in their pockets
instead
of a huge backpack filled with paper / hardcover books.

On the flip side,
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people
feel that the over-reliance on
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electronic
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devices
for
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reading
puts a strain on the reader’s eyes. This is
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because
tablets and smartphones emit blue light from their screens which causes
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stress
and irritation to the eyes upon prolonged exposure. Ophthalmologists have found that more than half of the patients who visit them face issues with their eyesight
primarily
due to the excessive usage of
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electronic
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devices
for
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reading
purpose.
Therefore
,
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people
need to take precaution while relying on
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reading
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books
on their gadgets.
Also
, software glitches or a weak battery can
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make
these
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devices
useless and
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reading
impossible. Since this can happen at the most inopportune times, it is not safe to rely
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on eBooks
alone.

To conclude
, the major benefit of e-books is the convenience of carrying a vast number of files on a single
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device
that
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people
can access anywhere. Despite the advantages of this trend, it has the drawback of affecting the reader’s eyesight.
Also
, any problem with the
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eBook
reader can
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make
the
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books
inaccessible.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Agree or disagree? Nowadays it is not important for people to have regularly family meals together. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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