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Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s lives. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while other say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. v.2

Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s lives. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while other say it is a negative one. v. 2
These days, we all are surrounded by electronic devices and thus we are subjected to advertisements. These ads are designed logically to target specific audiences and these have severe effects on our mental health and alters our psychology unknowingly. In this essay, I will examine the effects of advertisements on human kind. On one hand, relevant ads are helpful as they show the product which is required. It is often the case that we try to purchase stuff online, but we are unable to find the right item and eventually we don't buy, while google monitors our search and shows us relevant ads which sometimes shows the product we needed. For example, I was looking for a hot wheel toy for my nephew but it was difficult to find the one he needed, suddenly a poster shows up and that's what exactly I wanted. Moreover, it provided me the way to get discounts on the same product. On the other hand, advertisements are misleading and forces us to buy a specific merchandise. In other words, we tend to buy items which are not essential and are just luxury brand, these are often highly priced. The constant advertisement makes us irritated, some ads don't have any relevance to our needs, they are just there because the people paid money to show the advertisement. For instance, in my browser, I was shown sports advertisements which have no connection with me at all. Further, same ad was repeated multiple times on my laptop which made me feel exhausted and unhappy. In conclusion, advertisement is one of the main sources of income for digital platforms. So, they have no other way but to adapt to the industry. Advertisement lure people to buy unnecessary items and on the contrary, it helps to find the right item. Advertisement have both demerits and merits, but I think it's disadvantage outweigh it's advantage.
These days, we all
are surrounded
by electronic devices and
thus
we
are subjected
to
advertisements
. These ads
are designed
logically
to target specific audiences and these have severe effects on our mental health and alters our psychology
unknowingly
. In this essay, I will examine the effects of
advertisements
on human kind.

On one hand, relevant ads are helpful as they
show
the product which
is required
. It is
often
the case that we try to
purchase
stuff online,
but
we are unable to find the right
item
and
eventually
we don't
buy
, while google monitors our search and
shows
us relevant ads which
sometimes
shows
the product we needed.
For example
, I was looking for a hot wheel toy for my nephew
but
it was difficult to find the one he needed,
suddenly
a poster
shows
up and that's what exactly I wanted.
Moreover
, it provided me the way to
get
discounts on the same product.

On the other hand
,
advertisements
are misleading and forces us to
buy
a specific merchandise.
In other words
, we tend to
buy
items
which are not essential and are
just
luxury brand, these are
often
highly
priced. The constant
advertisement
makes
us irritated,
some
ads don't have any relevance to our needs, they are
just
there
because
the
people
paid money to
show
the
advertisement
.
For instance
, in my browser, I
was shown
sports
advertisements
which have no connection with me at all.
Further
, same ad
was repeated
multiple times on my laptop which made me feel exhausted and unhappy.

In conclusion
,
advertisement
is one of the main sources of income for digital platforms.
So
, they have no other way
but
to adapt to the industry.
Advertisement
lure
people
to
buy
unnecessary
items
and
on the contrary
, it
helps
to find the right
item
.
Advertisement
have
both demerits and merits,
but
I
think
it's disadvantage outweigh
it's
advantage.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s lives. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while other say it is a negative one. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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