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Advertising has become an inevitable part of our lives Some people believe that it is a positive aspect of our lives while others are of opposite belief Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Advertising has become an inevitable part of our lives Some people believe that it is a positive aspect of our lives while others are of opposite belief 1
IT IS ARGUED THAT VOLUNTARY SERVICES SUCH AS CHARITY, CLEANING THE NEIGHBOURHOOD, TEACHING SPORTS TO A YOUNG CHILDREN ETC SHOULD BE NECESSARY FOR THE HIGH SCHOOL CURRICULUM. I STRONGLY AGREE TO THIS EASSY AS IT NOT ONLY HELP STUDENTS BECOMING SOCIALLY RESPONSIBLE ADULTS BUT ALSO SHAPING THEIR CHARACTER. MOREOVER, SOCIETY TEACHES US TO TAKE RESPONSIBILITY OF THE COMMUNITY IN A SHAPE OF GOOD MANNER. FOR INSTANCE, THE INTRODUTION OF THE NEIGHBOURHOOD CLEAN SCHEME IN MY SCHOOL, ADDITIONALLY TEN YEARS AGO OUR INSTITUTE TEACHERS TAUGHT US TO NOT ONLY KEEP SURROUNDING CLEAN BUT ALSO TO NEVER LITTER WHEREVER I GO. I FEEL TO BE RESPONSIBLE TO MAINTAIN CLEANLINESS EVERYWHERE. SUCH SERVICES ARE NEEDED TO DEVELOP A BETTER SOCIETY IN THE FUTURE. IN ADDITION TO, THE FREELY SERVICES INDULGE THE OVERALL PERFORMANCE OF AN INDIVIDUAL. IT FORCES THE FEELING OF THE EMPATHY IN CHILDREN, WHICH IS NECESSARY FOR THEM. FOR EXAMPLE OUR ACADEMY ANNOUNCES CHARITY SERVICES THAT MAKES STUDENTS JOY AND SYMPATHY, THUS HELPS TO CREATE DEEP IDEAS AND THINKING IN HIS MIND, FURTHERMORE HELPED HIM TO BE A BETTER PERSON FOR HIS FAMILY AND DO NOT INVOLVE IN A IRRESPONSIBLE ACTS. WE CAN NOT DENY THE FACT THAT MANY STUDENTS MISUSE THE TIME ALLOCATED FOR THESE ACTIVITIES BY CONSIDERING THEM TO ENJOY WITH FRIENDS RATHER THAN A LERANING EXPERIENCE. TO RECAPITULATE IT IS SAID THAT, THE VOLUNTARY ACTIVITIES HAS ITS DRAWBACKS BUT IT IS STILL USEFUL IN SHAPING A CHILD AS A INVOLVEMENT IN A RESPONSIBLE CITIZEN AND ALSO IN THEIR OVERALL PERSONALITY DEVELOPMENT.
IT
IS ARGUED
THAT VOLUNTARY
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SERVICES
SUCH AS CHARITY, CLEANING THE
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NEIGHBOURHOOD
, TEACHING SPORTS TO A YOUNG
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CHILDREN
ETC SHOULD BE NECESSARY FOR THE HIGH SCHOOL

CURRICULUM. I
STRONGLY
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AGREE
TO THIS
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EASSY
AS IT NOT
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ONLY
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HELP
STUDENTS BECOMING
SOCIALLY
RESPONSIBLE ADULTS
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BUT
ALSO
SHAPING THEIR CHARACTER.

MOREOVER
, SOCIETY TEACHES US TO TAKE RESPONSIBILITY OF THE COMMUNITY IN A SHAPE OF
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GOOD
MANNER.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE
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INTRODUTION
OF THE
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NEIGHBOURHOOD
CLEAN SCHEME IN MY SCHOOL,
ADDITIONALLY
TEN YEARS AGO OUR INSTITUTE TEACHERS TAUGHT US TO NOT
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ONLY
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KEEP
SURROUNDING CLEAN
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BUT
ALSO
TO NEVER LITTER WHEREVER I GO. I FEEL TO BE RESPONSIBLE TO MAINTAIN CLEANLINESS EVERYWHERE. SUCH
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SERVICES
ARE NEEDED
TO DEVELOP A BETTER SOCIETY IN THE FUTURE.

IN ADDITION
TO, THE
FREELY
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SERVICES
INDULGE THE
OVERALL
PERFORMANCE OF AN INDIVIDUAL. IT FORCES THE FEELING OF THE EMPATHY IN CHILDREN, WHICH IS NECESSARY FOR THEM.
FOR EXAMPLE
OUR ACADEMY ANNOUNCES CHARITY
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SERVICES
THAT
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MAKES
STUDENTS JOY AND SYMPATHY,
THUS
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HELPS
TO CREATE DEEP
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IDEAS
AND THINKING IN HIS MIND,
FURTHERMORE
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HELPED
HIM TO BE A BETTER PERSON FOR HIS FAMILY AND DO NOT INVOLVE IN A IRRESPONSIBLE ACTS. WE CAN NOT DENY THE FACT THAT
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MANY
STUDENTS MISUSE THE TIME ALLOCATED FOR THESE ACTIVITIES BY CONSIDERING THEM TO ENJOY WITH FRIENDS
RATHER
THAN A
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LERANING
EXPERIENCE.

TO RECAPITULATE IT
IS SAID
THAT, THE VOLUNTARY ACTIVITIES HAS ITS DRAWBACKS
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BUT
IT IS
STILL
USEFUL IN SHAPING A CHILD AS A INVOLVEMENT IN A RESPONSIBLE CITIZEN AND
ALSO
IN THEIR
OVERALL
PERSONALITY DEVELOPMENT.
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IELTS essay Advertising has become an inevitable part of our lives Some people believe that it is a positive aspect of our lives while others are of opposite belief 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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