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Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. with this opinion? v. 1
Biology is one of the most important areas of science due to its direct relationship to survival and health. Observing the rapid advances made, it has been suggested that it is presently the optimum time to be alive. I strongly agree with this affirmation for two reasons, firstly lives have been improved, and secondly risks have been reduced. First, comparing life with a century ago, it is possible to list new benefits available such as hospitals, doctors, medicines, diagnoses, donors, and transplants, all of which were extremely rare previously. Advances in the sciences have improved lives across society considerably. For example, consider an operation in France several years ago whereby a woman received a complete face transplant. This would be unthinkable in 1910, therefore, due to science her life has undoubtedly improved. Secondly, health risks have fallen incredibly, so much so that it is possible to visit tropical countries which previously carried considerable dangers. This is because traditionally preventative measures such as vaccinations, immunisation and prescription tablets did not exist. In addition, over the last thirty years their cost was falling rendering exotic travel available to almost anyone with the funds. Therefore modern science has increased the opportunities and reduced the risks related to travel, there has been no parallel in history. To conclude, I strongly agree that biology and improvements in science have increased people’s wellbeing and their opportunities to explore the world. This is undoubtedly the first time in history such situations have existed.
Biology is one of the most
important
areas of
science
due to its direct relationship to survival and health. Observing the rapid advances made, it has
been suggested
that it is
presently
the optimum time to be alive. I
strongly
agree
with this affirmation for two reasons,
firstly
lives
have been
improved
, and
secondly
risks
have been
reduced
.

First
, comparing life with a century ago, it is possible to list new benefits available such as hospitals, doctors, medicines, diagnoses, donors, and transplants, all of which were
extremely
rare previously. Advances in the
sciences
have
improved
lives
across society
considerably
.
For example
, consider an operation in France several years ago whereby a woman received a complete face transplant. This would be unthinkable in 1910,
therefore
, due to
science
her life has
undoubtedly
improved
.

Secondly
, health
risks
have fallen
incredibly
,
so
much
so
that it is possible to visit tropical countries which previously carried considerable
dangers
. This is
because
traditionally
preventative measures such as vaccinations,
immunisation
and prescription tablets did not exist.
In addition
, over the last thirty years their cost was falling rendering exotic travel available to almost anyone with the funds.
Therefore
modern
science
has increased the opportunities and
reduced
the
risks
related to travel, there has been no parallel in history.

To conclude
, I
strongly
agree
that biology and improvements in
science
have increased
people
’s
wellbeing
and their opportunities to explore the world. This is
undoubtedly
the
first
time in history such situations have existed.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. with this opinion? v. 1

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