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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems v. 2
The best way to solve this is increasing the petrol price whether the pollution issues or developing traffic jams. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this essay. The essay will discuss several ideas with the following paragraphs. The price of petrol is increasing not the best way to solve the concern of air pollution and crowed traffic. The supporting season will give in the paragraphs. First of all, improving transportation is one way to reduce the situation above such as bus, sky train or taxi. For example, more sky train stations can make people use more sky train than private cars. Improving bus schedule time because many people always missed the bus so it can make them go to work late. The government should have policies for passengers who use taxis because many times the driver do not accept them. On condition, the driver might pay for the fine. In addition, most smoke is from an industry that emissions of carbon causing toxic pollution. The government should have theories that control business, for example, the announcement has a campaign plant tree for gain purify the air. To put it another way, there are convincing articles to clams that increasing the prices of gasoline is the best way. The most important is that more cars people drive expand more air pollution problems because people prefer private comfort and private life. Therefore, the cost of prices is increasing the worker will turn to using more transportation than private cars. In conclusion, it can be seen that there are many reasons why increasing prices is not the best way to solve this issue. As mentioned above, improving transportation. The government has a theory of protecting people and control companies.
The
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best
way to solve this is
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increasing
the petrol
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price
whether the
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pollution
issues or developing traffic jams. In my opinion, I
mostly
disagree with this essay. The essay will discuss several
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ideas
with the following paragraphs. The
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price
of petrol is
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increasing
not the
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best
way to solve the concern of air
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pollution
and crowed traffic.
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The
supporting season will give in the paragraphs.

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First of all
, improving transportation is one way to
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reduce
the situation above such as bus, sky train or taxi.
For example
, more sky train stations can
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make
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people
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use
more sky train than
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private
cars. Improving bus schedule time
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because
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many
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people
always missed the bus
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so
it can
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make
them go to work late. The
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government
should have policies for passengers who
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use
taxis
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because
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many
times the driver do not accept them. On condition, the driver might pay for the fine.
In addition
, most smoke is from an industry that emissions of carbon causing toxic
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pollution
. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should have theories that control business,
for example
, the announcement has a campaign plant tree for gain purify the air. To put it another way, there are convincing articles to clams that
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increasing
the
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prices
of gasoline is the
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best
way. The most
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important
is that more cars
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people
drive expand more air
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pollution
problems
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because
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people
prefer
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private
comfort and
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private
life.
Therefore
, the cost of
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prices
is
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increasing
the worker will turn to using more transportation than
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private
cars.

In conclusion
, it can be
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seen
that there are
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many
reasons why
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increasing
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prices
is not the
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best
way to solve this issue. As mentioned above, improving transportation. The
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government
has a theory of protecting
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people
and control
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companies
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
287 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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