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A year ago, you became a member of your local film club. You have decided that you do not want to continue your membership for another year. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letterstate what type of membership you have and how you have paid fo v.1

A year ago, you became a member of your local film club. You have decided that you do not want to continue your membership for another year. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letterstate what type of membership you have and how you have paid fo v. 1
Showing on the depicting criminal trials to the general public on the television is increasingly prevalent in some countries. In my view, the drawback of it far outweighs the advantages because not only does it give an opportunity to the criminals to escape away, but also such trials label the innocent as a culprit. Admittedly, there are numerous benefits to airing such trials. Firstly, it makes the general public aware of fine and sentences for a specific crime. To illustrate, in the USA, the live show for breaking traffic rules broadcasts on the television in order to know its citizens the type of punishment and the amount of fines for not following the traffic laws. Thus, people will be careful before breaking the rules. Secondly, legal proceeding will be faster. In a country like India, it has very slow proceeding system and it almost takes years to get justice, however, such airing of trials enables people to demand faster judicial system. Hence, people do have to wait a longer period of time having justice. Nonetheless, showing criminal trials on the television has many disadvantages. One of them is labelled culprit to innocent. Through such trials, many news channels or journalist takes the wrong benefit by printing untrue information about that person to get TRP. For instance, there are the chances where society does not accept the person who has not committed a crime if such shows are aired on the television, which might affect them mentally and socially. As a result, it can have a detrimental effect on their lifetime career. Another negative is an idea of getting released. Such shows offer a chance to criminals to do crime and get release easily, which means they are able to make good use of crime for their own sake and get easily free, which is unethical. In conclusion, although citizens tend to be cautious of doing any crime by watching a criminal trial on the television, I believe that wrong labelling and releasing from the jail, despite attempting crime are inevitable drawbacks which can have a detrimental effect on the lives of people.
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trials
to the
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general public
on the
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television
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prevalent in
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some
countries. In my view, the drawback of it far outweighs the advantages
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because
not
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only
does it give an opportunity to the
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criminals
to escape away,
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but
also
such
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trials
label the innocent as a culprit.

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, there are numerous benefits to airing such
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trials
.
Firstly
, it
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makes
the
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general public
aware of fine and sentences for a specific
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crime
. To illustrate, in the USA, the
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live
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show
for breaking traffic
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rules
broadcasts on the
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television
in order to know its citizens the type of punishment and the amount of fines for not following the traffic laws.
Thus
,
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people
will be careful
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before
breaking the
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rules
.
Secondly
, legal proceeding will be faster. In a country like India, it has
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very
slow proceeding system and it almost takes years to
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get
justice,
however
, such airing of
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trials
enables
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people
to demand faster judicial system.
Hence
,
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people
do
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have to
wait a longer period of time having justice.

Nonetheless, showing
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criminal
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trials
on the
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television
has
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many
disadvantages. One of them
is labelled
culprit to innocent. Through such
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trials
,
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many
news channels or journalist takes the
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wrong
benefit by printing untrue information about that person to
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get
TRP.
For instance
, there are the chances where society does not accept the person who has not committed a
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crime
if such
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shows
are aired
on the
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television
, which might affect them mentally and
socially
.
As a result
, it can have a detrimental effect on their lifetime career. Another
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negative
is an
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idea
of getting released. Such
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shows
offer a chance to
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criminals
to do
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crime
and
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get
release
easily
, which means they are able to
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make
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good
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use
of
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crime
for their
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own
sake and
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get
easily
free, which is unethical.

In conclusion
, although citizens tend to be cautious of doing any
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crime
by watching a
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criminal
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trial
on the
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television
, I believe that
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wrong
labelling and releasing from the jail, despite attempting
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crime
are inevitable drawbacks which can have a detrimental effect on the
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lives
of
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people
.
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IELTS essay A year ago, you became a member of your local film club. You have decided that you do not want to continue your membership for another year. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letterstate what type of membership you have and how you have paid fo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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