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A university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology (for example: computers and printers) that it provides for students. Or it can redesign spaces where students v.1

A university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology (for example: computers and printers) that it provides for students. Or it can redesign spaces where students v. 1
The mutual bonding within friends can be referred as friendship, which is mostly unconditional affection and selfless nature for each other. This feeling is so rare that sometimes friends fail to express it. But sadly, at times this kind of attachment creates complication in life which gradually results in misunderstanding of feelings hence ends in break up. However, many people believe that friendship can be meaningful an special, but also very complicated and I totally agree with it. Considering the good side that there are many great qualities of a great friend. A good being will always be there by your side in both rise and fall phase. In rise phase, he will always encourage to move forward and help to strengthen your calibre while in fall phase, shows you mirror of the mistakes and provide a hand to rectify. For instance, suppose in a race you drop on the ground, a well-being will give his hand to re-stand and encourage to finish it. He will be loyal and non-judgemental. While on the other side, there are few qualities which can weaken a close relationship over time. One of the priority reason for weakening relation is when we start taking others for granted may be with intensions or unintentionally. For example, when two friends are there for a longer period of time and eventually they take others for granted, there it starts to create hatred for each other. Other ways can also be lack of trust. In a nutshell, life is like a roller coaster, many ups and downs will come and pass. Instead of thinking about complications, a friend should always be always be motivating his friend in good situation and while in bad scenarios make him understand the mistake and help to fix it.
The mutual bonding within
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friends
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be referred
as friendship, which is
mostly
unconditional affection and selfless nature for each
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other
. This feeling is
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so
rare that
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sometimes
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friends
fail to express it.
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But
sadly
, at times this kind of attachment creates complication in life which
gradually
results in misunderstanding of feelings
hence
ends in break up.
However
,
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many
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people
believe that friendship can be meaningful
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special,
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very
complicated and I
totally
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agree
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Considering the
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good
side that there are
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many
great qualities of a great
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friend
. A
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good
being will always be there by your side in both rise and fall phase. In rise phase, he will always encourage to
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move
forward and
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help
to strengthen your
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while in fall phase,
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shows
you mirror of the mistakes and provide a hand to rectify.
For instance
, suppose in a race you drop on the ground, a well-being will give his hand to re-stand and encourage to finish it. He will be loyal and
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non-judgemental
.

While on the
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other
side, there are few qualities which can weaken a close relationship over time. One of the priority reason for weakening relation is when we
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start
taking others for granted may be with
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intensions
or
unintentionally
.
For example
, when two
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friends
are there for a longer period of time and
eventually
they take others for granted, there it
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starts
to create hatred for each
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other
.
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Other
ways can
also
be lack of trust.

In a nutshell, life is like a roller coaster,
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many
ups and downs will
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come
and pass.
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of thinking about complications, a
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friend
should
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always be always be
motivating his
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friend
in
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good
situation and while in
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scenarios
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make
him understand the mistake and
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help
to
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fix
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IELTS essay A university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology (for example: computers and printers) that it provides for students. Or it can redesign spaces where students v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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