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A serious problem affecting countries right across the globe is the lack of water for drinking, washing and other household uses. Why do many countries face water shortages, and what could be done to alleviate the problem? v.2

A serious problem affecting countries right across the globe is the lack of water for drinking, washing and other household uses. Why do many countries face water shortages, and what could be done to alleviate the problem? v. 2
Potable water plays a significant role in housekeeping. However, some ecologists state that people are facing water scarcity all over the world. In this essay, I will consider major factors for this shortage and purpose some viable solutions. Let us start with reasons why the world is experimenting water shortage. The first cause is that people frequently pollute water sources. Many cities are dependent on water supplies, such as rivers and lakes, but because many factories and plants, which operate near these reservoirs, regularly dump harmful waste into them, which gradually deteriorate water quality to the poisonous level. Another reason is that humanity tends to waste water in households. Most families, for example, use water carelessly, while they both wash the dishes and do the laundry, since it is either free of charge or negligently cheap, which makes people to forget about its crucial value for life. Therefore, after analyzing, it is clear that these reasons contribute to this unpleasant situation with the lack of water. Nevertheless, some ecologists suggest the following steps to deal with water scarcity. Firstly, they recommend factors to install filters. The way forward might be for governments to force manufacturers to equip their plants with purifying technologies so that they will stop dumping toxic substances into water sources. Secondly, they also advise to people to use water carefully. This problem can be addressed, if authorities considerably increases the water bills to the cost, when citizens decrease their consumption of water, so that they will start to appreciate its true importance. As a result, after analyzing, it is obvious that it is probable to tackle this uncomfortable situation with water scarcity. In conclusion, although there are a multitude of reasons that create the lack of water worldwide, I think that it is possible to solve this complication by taking the above mentioned measures.
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plays a significant role in housekeeping.
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some
ecologists state that
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people
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water
scarcity all over the world. In this essay, I will consider major factors for this shortage and purpose
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some
viable solutions.

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us
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with
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reasons
why the world is experimenting
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water
shortage. The
first
cause is that
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people
frequently
pollute
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water
sources.
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cities are dependent on
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supplies, such as rivers and lakes,
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but
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because
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many
factories and plants, which operate near these reservoirs,
regularly
dump harmful waste into them, which
gradually
deteriorate
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water
quality to the poisonous level. Another
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reason
is that humanity tends to waste
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water
in households. Most families,
for example
,
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use
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water
carelessly
, while they both wash the dishes and do the laundry, since it is either free of charge or
negligently
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cheap
, which
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makes
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people
to forget about its crucial value for life.
Therefore
, after analyzing, it is
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clear
that these
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reasons
contribute to this unpleasant situation with the lack of water.

Nevertheless
,
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some
ecologists suggest the following steps to deal with
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water
scarcity.
Firstly
, they recommend factors to install filters. The way forward might be for
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governments
to force manufacturers to equip their plants with purifying technologies
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so
that they will
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stop
dumping toxic substances into
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water
sources.
Secondly
, they
also
advise to
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people
to
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use
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water
carefully
. This problem can
be addressed
, if authorities
considerably
increases the
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water
bills to the cost, when citizens decrease their consumption of
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water
,
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so
that they will
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start
to appreciate its true importance.
As a result
, after analyzing, it is obvious that it is probable to tackle this uncomfortable situation with
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water
scarcity.

In conclusion
, although there are a multitude of
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reasons
that create the lack of
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water
worldwide, I
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think
that it is possible to solve this complication by taking the above mentioned measures.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay A serious problem affecting countries right across the globe is the lack of water for drinking, washing and other household uses. Why do many countries face water shortages, and what could be done to alleviate the problem? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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