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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages Do you agree or disagree Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car v.2

Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car v. 2
There are a number of people believe that people who own cars have more cons than its pros while using it. So, i agree with them. Furthermore, i will explain in details as below. First of all, advantages of of having car that cars can take people wherever they want. Nowadays, people look for a way to be more comfortable. As, it is easy to collect them to places they needed. For example, instead of using public transportation, they prefer to using their own cars to shift them from home to their workplace on the right time. Instead of spending long hours for waiting in the bus station until the proper bus to pick them up. In research survey came out from public transportation services, it showed that people who use their own cars, the can be at their workplace on time. Whereas Another example, human choose to own cars for the purpose of emergency. If there is any urgent case, they will see their available at anytime. As there are enormous of people who suffer from public services unavailability during late hours in the night. In this case, they would the encouragement to have a car to avoid like this issue. However, there are large number of people complain from roads congested during the day. As, in particular, in the rush hours which it happens in the morning. Whereas, there are a number want to be in their workplace on time. So, people who have private cars are the reason of road congestion. For example, RTA " road transportation authority" company prevail, that the principal of causing this passive effect came from those who own cars. Currently, they are studying to reduce from this obstacle. As in recent research happened in Australia. There were proofs shows that. The more people convert to use their own cars, the more of air pollution would increase gradually. Which it will lead to global warming. To conclude, it is beneficial to to have a car. But we believe that owning cars to road congested and air pollution at the same. So using public services as alternative, it would help to decrease from the proportion of polluted air, and road congested all to gather for the purpose of keeping a kind of balance on earth.
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cars
have more cons than its pros while using it.
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So
,
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i
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, advantages
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that
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can take
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wherever they want. Nowadays,
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people
look for a way to be more comfortable.
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, it is easy to collect them to places they needed.
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,
instead
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public
transportation, they prefer to
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their
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cars
to shift them from home to their workplace on the right time.
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of spending long hours for waiting in the bus station until the proper bus to pick them up. In research survey came out from
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public
transportation services, it
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showed
that
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people
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who
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use
their
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own
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cars
,
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can be at their workplace on time. Whereas Another example, human choose to
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own
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cars
for the purpose of emergency. If there is any urgent case, they will
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see
their available at anytime.
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As
there are enormous of
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people
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suffer from
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services unavailability during late hours in the night.
In this case
, they would the encouragement to have a
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car
to avoid like this issue.

However
, there are large number of
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people
complain from
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roads
congested during the day. As,
in particular
, in the rush hours which it happens in the morning.
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, there are a number want to be in their workplace on time.
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,
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people
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have private
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cars
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road
congestion.
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, RTA
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prevail, that the principal of causing this passive effect came from those
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.
Currently
, they are studying to
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reduce
from this obstacle.
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in recent research happened in Australia. There were proofs
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convert to
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their
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own
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more
of air pollution would increase
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.
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Which
it will lead to global warming.

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, it is beneficial
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car
.
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But
we believe that owning
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cars
to
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congested and air pollution at the same.
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using
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public
services as alternative, it would
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help
to decrease from the proportion of polluted air, and
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road
congested all to gather for the purpose of keeping a kind of balance on earth.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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