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A recent study has shown that over 50% of school children cannot write legibly. The researchers concluded that the widespread use of smartphones, tablets and computers by children from as young as 12 months old was to blame. We are now living in a “post v.2

A recent study has shown that over 50% of school children cannot write legibly. The researchers concluded that the widespread use of smartphones, tablets and computers by children from as young as 12 months old was to blame. We are now living in a “post v. 2
Since the beginning of the 21st century, 90% of schools have changed their learning systems, where they have adopted teaching students how to improve their typing skills rather than teaching them the traditional handwriting technique. Some people believe that schools should stop teaching handwriting and replace it by teaching typing skills, while others argue that handwriting is very important, and it should not be abolished from the learning system. This essay will discuss the reasons why schools should adopt teaching the typing skills at schools and stop teaching the handwriting entirely. Teaching student the traditional handwriting technique should be stopped, and the typing skills should be adopted because all jobs now use the computers and smart phones. Knowing how to use computers is the essence of doing any task, where people stop using the traditional paper and pen at their offices. Recent research, which was conducted in the Cambridge University, has shown that 87% of American employers accept only employees who know how to use computers, and it suggests that all the jobs in the future will need using computer skills. Therefore, it seems clear that schools must stop teaching the handwriting and alter to teach how to improve the typing skills since most of jobs in the future will need these skills. On the other hand, some people think that the era of technology will end in the near future, and schools should not stop teaching handwriting. These people connect the continuous of technologies with the existence of oil. But these people are unaware of the fact that scientists now are searching for alternative resources for power, such as wind and solar power. Thus, schools should stop teaching handwriting and focus of teaching typing skills since the technology era will remain for long time. In conclusion, this essay discussed the reason why schools should teach typing skills rather that teaching handwriting. In my opinion, I am inclined to believe that all careers these days require knowledge of tying skills, so schools should focus on teaching it rather that teaching traditional handwriting.
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their learning systems, where they have adopted
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teaching
students how to
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improve
their typing
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skills
rather
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teaching
them the
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traditional
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handwriting
technique.
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people
believe that
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schools
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stop
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teaching
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handwriting
and replace it by
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teaching
typing
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skills
, while others argue that
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handwriting
is
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very
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important
, and it should not
be abolished
from the learning system. This essay will discuss the reasons why
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schools
should adopt
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teaching
the typing
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skills
at
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and
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stop
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teaching
the
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handwriting
entirely
.

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traditional
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handwriting
technique should be
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stopped
, and the typing
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skills
should
be adopted
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because
all jobs
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now
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use
the computers and smart phones. Knowing how to
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use
computers is the essence of doing any task, where
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people
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stop
using the
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traditional
paper and pen at their offices. Recent research, which
was conducted
in the Cambridge University, has shown that 87% of American employers accept
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only
employees who know how to
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use
computers, and it suggests that all the jobs in the future will need using computer
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skills
.
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, it seems
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clear
that
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schools
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must
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stop
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teaching
the
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handwriting
and alter to teach how to
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improve
the typing
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skills
since
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most of jobs
in the future will need these
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skills
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,
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people
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think
that the era of technology will
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end
in the near future, and
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should not
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. These
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connect
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the continuous of
technologies with the existence of oil.
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But
these
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people
are unaware of the fact that scientists
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now
are searching for alternative resources for power, such as wind and solar power.
Thus
,
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schools
should
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stop
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teaching
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handwriting
and focus of
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teaching
typing
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skills
since the technology era will remain for long time.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed the reason why
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schools
should teach typing
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skills
rather
that
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teaching
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handwriting
. In my opinion, I
am inclined
to believe that all careers these days require knowledge of tying
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skills
,
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so
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schools
should focus on
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teaching
it
rather
that
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teaching
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traditional
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handwriting
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay A recent study has shown that over 50% of school children cannot write legibly. The researchers concluded that the widespread use of smartphones, tablets and computers by children from as young as 12 months old was to blame. We are now living in a “post v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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