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A rapidly increasing global population will lead to many social and environmental problems unless something is done to address this impending catastrophe. Suggest ways to help slow down this trend. v.2

A rapidly increasing global population will lead to many social and environmental problems unless something is done to address this impending catastrophe. Suggest ways to help slow down this trend. v. 2
It is true that the morbidity rate has risen significantly both developed and developing countries and creates numerous issues like poverty. Although overpopulation creates many environmental and social issues in society, it can be tackled in more effective ways. The first and foremost reason for the higher population is the lack of education among people in the community so the government and health authority have an important role to control the growing population. For example, they can organise effective awareness programmes right from the school and other institutions with showing documentries, short films, pictures and so on. Also, can provide awareness procession across the town and village where many people may pay greater attention on it. As a result, it would be protected from the society from excessive population otherwise it will adversely affect both family and eco-system. Another important remedy is conducting special training for married people regarding usage of contraceptive methods. Today, the majority of people are well educated so it certainly easy to understand, whereas in the past the education was limited. Moreover, the authority can convey messages related to consequences of growing population through social media such as Youtube, Facebook and so on. Consequently, these methods certainly can reduce the number child birth every years globally. To sum up, the overpoulation always leads many problems in society and surrounding. Therefore, if the authority take a crucial role of giving proper education and awareness programmes for everyone, it can definitely reduce the population rate in
It is true that the morbidity rate has risen
significantly
both developed and
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developing countries
and creates numerous issues like poverty. Although overpopulation creates
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many
environmental and social issues in society, it can
be tackled
in more effective ways.

The
first
and foremost reason for the higher
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population
is the lack of education among
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people
in the community
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so
the
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government
and health authority have an
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important
role to control the growing
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population
.
For example
, they can
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organise
effective awareness
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programmes
right from the school and other institutions with showing
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documentries
, short films, pictures and
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so
on.
Also
, can provide awareness procession across the town and village where
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many
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people
may pay greater attention on it.
As a result
, it would
be protected
from the society from excessive
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population
otherwise
it will
adversely
affect both family and
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eco-system
.

Another
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important
remedy is conducting special training for married
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people
regarding usage of contraceptive methods.
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Today
, the majority of
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people
are
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well educated
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so
It seems that a verb is missing.
it
certainly
easy to understand, whereas in the past the education
was limited
.
Moreover
, the authority can convey messages related to consequences of growing
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population
through social media such as
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Youtube
, Facebook and
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so
on.
Consequently
, these methods
certainly
can
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reduce
the number child birth every
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years
globally.

To sum up, the
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overpoulation
always leads
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many
problems in society and surrounding.
Therefore
, if the authority take a crucial role of giving proper education and awareness
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programmes
for everyone, it can definitely
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reduce
the
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population
rate in
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay A rapidly increasing global population will lead to many social and environmental problems unless something is done to address this impending catastrophe. Suggest ways to help slow down this trend. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
247 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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