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A poor infrastructure hinders under developed countries from progressing and modernizing Some people think that this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid To what extent do you agree with this opinion v.1

A poor infrastructure hinders under developed countries from progressing and modernizing Some people think that this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid 1
The increasing trend of instant foods has made peoples life easy, so that, they can easily cope up with the todays busy lifestyle. Although, there are pros and cons of this trend, in my view, advantages are far more than the disadvantages. This essay will discuss the benefits of the trend of convenience foods and its superiority over disadvantages. In today’s busy world, where everyone wants to ease their life, the ready-to-eat foods are the sigh of relief for them. The major advantage of such foods is, firstly, they are easily available in different varieties and secondly they are the least time consuming. For instance, I have very busy working schedule, so, I usually find something instant to eat rather than wasting an hour of cooking. Therefore, the easy accessibility and time saving, are the two main benefits of convenience foods. In regards to the comparison of pros and cons, the benefits outweigh losses because the modernization of lives demands less time consuming things. While the new generation wants the fastest cars, smart phones and online games, the same goes for the food. For example, if you have to work more than thirteen hours per day, you will never waste an hour of cooking, instead you will find something convenient to eat. Therefore, the advantages of this trend are much more than the disadvantages. To conclude, in today’s world of speed, the trend of convenient food is not just a necessity, but also a fashion. Therefore the advantages of easy availability and less time consuming, outweighs the disadvantages.
The increasing
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of instant
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that, they can
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todays
busy lifestyle. Although, there are pros and cons of this
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trend
, in my view,
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advantages
are far more than the disadvantages. This essay will discuss the benefits of the
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of convenience
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foods
and its superiority over disadvantages.

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’s busy world, where everyone wants to
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ease
their life, the ready-to-eat
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foods
are the sigh of relief for them. The major
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advantage
of such
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foods
is,
firstly
, they are
easily
available in
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different
varieties and
secondly
they are the least
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time consuming
.
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, I have
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very
busy working schedule,
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, I
usually
find something instant to eat
rather
than wasting an hour of cooking.
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, the easy accessibility and
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saving, are the two main benefits of convenience foods.

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because
the modernization of
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lives
demands less
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time consuming
things. While the new generation wants the fastest cars, smart phones and online games, the same goes for the
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food
.
For example
, if you
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have to
work more than thirteen hours per day, you will never waste an hour of cooking,
instead
you will find something convenient to eat.
Therefore
, the
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advantages
of this
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trend
are much more than the disadvantages.

To conclude
, in
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today
’s world of speed, the
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of convenient
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food
is not
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just
a necessity,
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but
also
a fashion.
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Therefore
the
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of easy availability and less
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time consuming
, outweighs the disadvantages.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A poor infrastructure hinders under developed countries from progressing and modernizing Some people think that this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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