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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons v.43

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? Give reasons v. 43
With the time changing, social status and values also changing fast and people are judged in different manner in contrast to past times where prestige, kindness and trust were given weightage over money & social status. I believe that so called old fashioned values such as honor, love, compassion, trust are eternal and people of these qualities are revered everywhere. People who think that social status and materialistic items should be considered while judging an individual have some valid points. Firstly, nowadays most of the youngsters believe in flaunting the items such as mobile phone, expensive car, apparels etc…, consequently, this has been the part of their prestige symbol and habits. For example, my sister who shifted to Mumbai and found that local people discard the others who are not wearing trendy cloths and consider them old fashioned. Secondly, people’s attitude towards life has changed drastically because of busy life and day to day struggle. As a result, people do not get time to help others and show their kind behavior. However, people still value that universally accepted good qualities like help, compassion, love etc. and are given higher status in society. While people are busy in taking care of their life, there are people who devoted their life for others. For example, Mr. Kailash Satyarthi who won the noble prize for saving children from child labour and gave new life to them. Because of his selfless efforts to protect children, he is respectable in all countries and listed one of the famous personalities in the times magazine. In conclusion, though people judge the other based on the place in society, money, cars, and big bungalow etc. which are items for living luxury life, everyone respect the people who exhibit the qualities like helping others, shows empathy, kind behavior and generosity, Irrespective of their materialistic belongings.
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people
are judged
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different
manner
in contrast
to past
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times where
prestige, kindness and trust were
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given
weightage over money
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; social
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status
. I believe that
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so called
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old fashioned
values such as honor,
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love
, compassion, trust are eternal and
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people
of these qualities
are revered
everywhere.

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People
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who
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think
that social
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status
and materialistic items should
be considered
while judging an individual have
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some
valid points.
Firstly
, nowadays most of the youngsters believe in flaunting the items such as mobile phone, expensive car, apparels etc…,
consequently
, this has been the part of their prestige symbol and habits.
For example
, my sister
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who
shifted to Mumbai and found that local
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people
discard the others
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who
are not wearing trendy cloths and consider them
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old fashioned
.
Secondly
,
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people’s
attitude towards
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life
has
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changed
drastically
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because
of busy
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life
and day to day struggle.
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,
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people
do not
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get
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time
to
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help
others and
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show
their kind behavior.

However
,
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people
still
value that
universally
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accepted
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good
qualities like
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help
, compassion,
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love
etc. and are
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given
higher
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status
in society. While
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people
are busy in taking care of their
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life
, there are
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people
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who
devoted their
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life
for others.
For example
, Mr.
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Kailash
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Satyarthi
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who
won the noble prize for saving children from child
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labour
and gave new
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life
to them.
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Because
of his selfless efforts to protect children, he is respectable in all countries and listed one of the
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famous
personalities in the
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times
magazine.

In conclusion
, though
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people
judge the
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other
based on the place in society, money, cars, and
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big
bungalow etc. which are items for living luxury
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life
, everyone
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respect
the
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people
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who
exhibit the qualities like helping others,
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shows
empathy, kind behavior and generosity, Irrespective of their materialistic belongings.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? Give reasons v. 43

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4 paragraphs
306 words
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