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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. v.40

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. v. 40
Social status, wealth and material possession have turned into the indicators to judge someone in the society these days while traditions, good quality and honour are no longer valued, though they are the de facto to judge a person. I agree that modern world has a completely different set of criteria for assessing or honouring a member of the society, though they are not the real elements to define a person. Earlier, societies had some specific indicators to judge a man or woman. Among the judging indicators, they preferred qualities like honesty, kindness, trusts, honour etc. But with the change of time, such pointers have vanished. Unluckily the present society prefers social status or riches to judge anyone. A real-life experience may make it simpler. Recently, I closely observed a local election in a distant part of India. Among the two candidates – one of them came from a high profile background while the other one was a shabby man who merely had his own permanent living space in the locality. The majority of the people supported the first individual. They took him granted as a gentleman as he is enriched with material possessions. On the contrary, only a few people supported the poor guy. He was unable to spend bucks for the election but was competing on some moral grounds. He dreamt of changing the society. Unluckily he was defeated by the wealthy candidate. The rich man did not allow his opposition to be an obstacle to his success. This triumph and defeat made me realise that material possessions are the key to judging as important in society. When people have enough riches to spend, they can buy social status and supports. But unfortunately, when someone comes up with humanitarian features, social elites term them as old-fashioned. They are ignored. Therefore, I think such ideas should be changed. We should appreciate the humane features than social status and material possessions. Otherwise, the consequences will be detrimental. When the social status will be the indicator to judge oneself, I believe that would be too humiliating and may lead to massive social disorder.
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, wealth and
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material
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possession
have turned into the
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indicators
to
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judge
someone in the
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society
these days while traditions,
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good
quality and
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honour
are no longer valued, though they are the de facto to
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judge
a person. I
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agree
that modern world has a completely
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different
set of criteria for assessing or
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a member of the
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society
, though they are not the real elements to define a person.

Earlier,
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societies
had
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some
specific
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indicators
to
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judge
a
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man
or woman. Among the judging
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indicators
, they preferred qualities like honesty, kindness, trusts,
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honour
etc.
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with the
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change
of time, such pointers have vanished.
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the present
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society
prefers
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social
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status
or riches to
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judge
anyone. A real-life experience may
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make
it simpler. Recently, I
closely
observed a local election in a distant part of India. Among the two candidates
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–
one of them came from a high profile background while the other one was a shabby
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man
who
merely
had his
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own
permanent living space in the locality. The majority of the
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people
supported the
first
individual. They took him granted as a gentleman as he
is enriched
with
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material
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possessions
.
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,
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only
a few
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people
supported the poor guy. He was unable to spend bucks for the election
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but
was competing on
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some
moral grounds. He dreamt of changing the
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society
.
Unluckily
he
was defeated
by the wealthy candidate. The rich
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man
did not
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allow
his opposition to be an obstacle to his success.

This triumph and defeat made me
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realise
that
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material
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possessions
are the key to judging as
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important
in
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society
. When
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people
have
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enough
riches to spend, they can
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buy
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social
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status
and supports.
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unfortunately, when someone
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comes
up with humanitarian features,
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social
elites term them as
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old
-fashioned. They are
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ignored
.

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, I
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think
such
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ideas
should be
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changed
. We should appreciate the humane features than
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social
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status
and
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material
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possessions
.
Otherwise
, the consequences will be detrimental. When the
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social
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status
will be the
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indicator
to
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judge
oneself, I believe that would be too humiliating and may lead to massive
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social
disorder.
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. v. 40

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
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