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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons v.30

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? Give reasons v. 30
At all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, it is seen that too much emphasis is given on learning facts rather than doing practical. Although, theoretical insight is important but if you are not aware of its application, then it is of no use. Some people do agree that learning facts are very beneficial. For example, if I hadn't studied about the Indus Valley civilization in history, then I would never know how civilization evolved in India. For example, how ornaments did come into existence, since earlier in ancient times women wear jewellery made out of animal bones. Likewise, today’s generation will wear expensive jewellery made out of gold and silver to adorn themselves. On the other side, as you see subjective knowledge is not enough. One should have practical skills in order to survive in today’s industry. For example, students who study engineering in computer science need to have knowledge of all the different languages being used in coding. Coding is not about learning the language, but it’s equally important practice. The more you practice the more you excel. To summarise, I would like to say it is important to have to a strong base of all the subjects that you study, but its practical value is equally significant. It has been observed that at all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, more emphasis is being given on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. I totally agree that reading books is not enough for one to excel. In conclusion, I would say that one should have practical knowledge, because practical skills give you a correct idea of what you have studied and how will it be beneficial in the real world.
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seen
that too much emphasis is
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learning
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than doing
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practical
. Although, theoretical insight is
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important
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but
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use
.

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learning
facts are
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very
beneficial.
For example
, if I hadn't studied about the Indus Valley civilization in history, then I would never know how civilization evolved in India.
For example
, how ornaments did
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come
into existence, since earlier in ancient times women wear
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jewellery
made out of animal bones.
Likewise
,
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today
’s generation will wear expensive
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jewellery
made out of gold and silver to adorn themselves.

On the other side, as you
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see
subjective knowledge is not
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enough
. One should have
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practical
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skills
in order to survive in
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today
’s industry.
For example
, students who study engineering in computer science need to have knowledge of all the
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different
languages being
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used
in coding. Coding is not about
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learning
the language,
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but
it’s
equally
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important
practice. The more you practice the more you excel.

To
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summarise
, I would like to say it is
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important
to
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a strong base of all the subjects that you study,
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but
its
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practical
value is
equally
significant. It has
been observed
that at all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, more emphasis is being
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given
on
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learning
facts and not
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enough
on
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learning
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practical
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skills
. I
totally
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agree
that reading books is not
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enough
for one to excel.
In conclusion
, I would say that one should have
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practical
knowledge,
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because
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practical
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skills
give you a correct
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idea
of what you have studied and how will it be beneficial in the real world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? Give reasons v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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