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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.12

One should not change their character based on their situations and needs. Some argue that people are getting respected based on their status in society and wealth at present. However, in past, everyone gave more significance to each other’s belief and humanity. I completely believe that in today’s world worthiness of a person is dependent on material wealth rather than innate qualities such as trust and humanity. People who are rich materially and socially are given the first priority in the current day society. This is because in current scenario everything is functioning as result of money. Without money nothing is possible in today’s society. For example, during the COVID times, people with sufficient amount of money managed to handle the situation. On the other hand, laborers who were working in other states were not given any attention. Consequently, they were made to walk thousands of kilometers to their hometown while nobody cared about them because they are not socially and economically stable. So, money is the main factor to save us in this modernized world. Traditionally, people with humanity, trust and love were considered to be worth. People were less attracted towards money in those days. They considered one’s character to be their important possession. To illustrate, everyone used to abide by rules in olden days and as a result corruption was very rare and everyone was self – disciplined. These things made everyone to follow certain principles in their life with good innate character. Due to technological development, slowly the society got changed and finally everything got corrupted. To conclude, whatever the situation may be, one should not lose their quality of life to earn monetary wealth. Worthiness earned by money will last only for few days. Everyone should learn to respect others based on their innate god qualities.
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their character based on their situations and needs.
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Some
argue that
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people
are getting respected based on their status in
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society
and wealth at present.
However
,
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in past
,
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everyone
gave more significance to each
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other’s
belief and humanity. I completely believe that in
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today
’s world worthiness of a person is dependent on material wealth
rather
than innate qualities such as trust and humanity.

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People
who are rich
materially
and
socially
are
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given
the
first
priority in the
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current
day
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society
. This is
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because
in
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current
scenario everything is functioning as result of
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money
. Without
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money
nothing is possible in
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today
’s
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society
.
For example
, during the
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COVID
times,
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people
with sufficient amount of
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money
managed to handle the situation. On the
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other
hand, laborers who were working in
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other
states were not
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given
any attention.
Consequently
, they
were made
to walk thousands of kilometers to their hometown while nobody cared about them
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because
they are not
socially
and
economically
stable.
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So
,
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money
is the main factor to save us in this modernized world.

Traditionally
,
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people
with humanity, trust and
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love
were considered
to be worth.
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People
were less attracted towards
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money
in those days. They considered one’s character to be their
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important
possession. To illustrate,
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everyone
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used
to abide by
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rules
in olden days and
as a result
corruption was
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very
rare and
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everyone
was
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self – disciplined
. These things made
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everyone
to follow certain principles in their life with
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good
innate character. Due to technological development,
slowly
the
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society
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got
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changed
and
finally
everything
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got
corrupted.

To conclude
, whatever the situation may be, one should not lose their quality of life to earn monetary wealth. Worthiness earned by
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money
will last
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only
for few days.
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Everyone
should learn to respect others based on their innate god qualities.
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion?

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