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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.7

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? v. 7
In this day and age, one is firstly determined by his social status and how many things he owns and his manner comes at the second. The reasons for this might be our modern society and our new way of thinking. In my opinion, indeed, old-fashioned values do not seem as important as it was. First of all, modern society has created more modern values, such as one's possessions and success. For instance, as the phone business continues to grow, people have been spending more and more money on buying phones. People now will treat you the same as the value of that phone. Another example is whether you are successful or not. The only thing that they care about is how much money you have made, how many houses you bought, etc. Nobody will take into consideration your kindness. Secondly, as time changes, our way of thinking does change, too. People nowadays mostly only know how to make profits and take advantage of other people. If they go on nicely doing their work, they soon will lose their money and then become poor. No one will ever respect them. Moreover, in this modern-day, you cannot trust anyone completely. You must always have doubts seeing that "trust" is no longer important. In conclusion, nowadays, social status and one's success are more essential than trust, honour and kindness. The modern society, as well as our new way of judging other people, maybe the reasons that lead to this opinion.
In this day and age, one is
firstly
determined by his social status and how
many
things he
owns
and his manner
comes
at the second. The reasons for this might be our
modern
society and our new way of thinking. In my opinion,
indeed
,
old
-fashioned values do not seem as
important
as it was.

First of all
,
modern
society has created more
modern
values, such as one's possessions and success.
For instance
, as the phone business continues to grow,
people
have been spending more and more money on buying phones.
People
now
will treat you the same as the value of that phone. Another example is whether you are successful or not. The
only
thing that they care about is how much money you have made, how
many
houses
you
bought
, etc. Nobody will take into consideration your kindness.

Secondly
, as time
changes
, our way of thinking does
change
, too.
People
nowadays
mostly
only
know how to
make
profits and take advantage of other
people
. If they go on
nicely
doing their work, they
soon
will lose their money and then become poor. No one will ever respect them.
Moreover
, in this modern-day, you cannot trust anyone completely. You
must
always have doubts seeing that
"
trust
"
is no longer
important
.

In conclusion
, nowadays, social status and one's success are more essential than trust,
honour
and kindness. The
modern
society,
as well
as our new way of judging other
people
, maybe the reasons that lead to this opinion.
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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