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A person should never make an important decision alone. v.4

A person should never make an important decision alone. v. 4
Making decision is a sensitive issue to everyone and it needs attention and full understanding. In other opinions, they believe that a person should not urge to do any relevant decision alone. In decision making there are many factors needs to be considered like the age, level of mental and physical wellbeing and position in life. In some countries like the Philippines person below 18 years old considered as a minor and don't let to establish any commitment especially in legal aspects like marriage, job, and health operations. Approval and consent of parents are required before any minors allow doing any certain actions. It is believed that a below 18 years old person don't have the capacity to stand alone and still dependent with their guardians. Their minds are still immature and it demands experience. Some of their decisions are too aggressive and do not realise the advantages and disadvantages of many things. Their decisions are easily influenced by high emotions and don't listen or pay attention to different advice and selections that may result in a positive or negative outcome. Another example of these is in the government, senators are not allowed to take any decisions by themselves for the nation. Superior people need to account their opinion and signature in order to establish any law and bills. In these ways, the probability of being bias is lessened. It is also a manner of respect to the person in a higher position. In addition to that, people with mental problems also need full attention when it comes to choosing or deciding to any options. Their process of thinking is not reliable anymore due to some diminished brain functions and some congenital problems with their brains. In summary, committing to any decisions demand high responsibility and component in order to deliver a positive or negative results.
Making
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decision
is a sensitive issue to everyone and it
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needs
attention and full understanding. In other opinions, they believe that a
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person
should not urge to do any relevant
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decision
alone.

In
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decision making
there are
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many
factors
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needs
to
be considered
like the age, level of mental and physical
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wellbeing
and position in life.
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In
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some
countries like the Philippines
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person
below 18 years
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old
considered as a minor and don't
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let
to establish any commitment
especially
in legal aspects like marriage, job, and health operations. Approval and consent of parents
are required
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before
any minors
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allow
doing any certain actions. It
is believed
that a below 18 years
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old
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person
don't have the capacity to stand alone and
still
dependent with their guardians. Their minds are
still
immature and it demands experience.
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Some
of their
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decisions
are too aggressive and do not
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realise
the advantages and disadvantages of
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many
things. Their
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decisions
are
easily
influenced by high emotions and don't listen or pay attention to
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different
advice and selections that may result in a
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positive
or
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negative
outcome.

Another example of these is in the
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government
, senators are not
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allowed
to take any
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decisions
by themselves for the nation. Superior
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people
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need
to account their opinion and signature in order to establish any law and bills. In these ways, the probability of being bias
is lessened
. It is
also
a manner of respect to the
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person
in a higher position.

In addition
to that,
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people
with mental problems
also
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need
full attention when it
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comes
to choosing or deciding to any options. Their process of thinking is not reliable anymore due to
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some
diminished brain functions and
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some
congenital problems with their brains.

In summary, committing to any
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decisions
demand high responsibility and component in order to deliver a
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positive
or
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negative
results.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay A person should never make an important decision alone. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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