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A number of tv programsion is growing. some people say that it is good while others say it affects the quality of tv program. discuss both and opine. v.1

A number of tv programsion is growing. some people say that it is good while others say it affects the quality of tv program. v. 1
In the contemporary era, the amount of television programs is increasing drastically. It is often argued that it holds a positive aspect, whilst others disagree and think quality of the television content will suffer. In my opinion, regulatory checks should be performed to improve the quality of the programs, nevertheless; both points will be discussed in the essay. To commence with the first notion, it is clear that an increasing number of television programs will provide more content therefore it will play a crucial role to enhance the knowledge base of the viewers. Moreover it will provide a variety of content which will teach the individual about various subjects. To cite an example, A recent survey conducted by times of India revealed that the knowledge base of the individuals was increased by 60% after watching television programs. Shifting towards the second school of thought, Many believe that quality of the content will suffer as more quantity need to be generated in a short period of time. Eventualy, in a limited time span, Tv program directors need to produce a large number of episodes which will decrease the quality of the program. For instance, One research paper from Harvard University suggested that quality of the tv programs dropped by 45% when they released more than eight episodes per week. Having said the arguments and counter arguments, I would like to infer that checks should be implemented in regular interval to curb the increasing number of television programs. Once these checks are successfully installed it will thereby improve the quality of the programs. To conclude, Although number of television programs will increase the knowledge of the individuals, some still feel that this rapid growth will depreciate the quality of the tv episodes as time span is extremely low to create the content. However, few regulatory checks must be considered in the development stage of the tv episodes to enhance the quality of the programs.
In the contemporary era, the amount of
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is increasing
drastically
. It is
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often
argued that it holds a
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positive
aspect, whilst others disagree and
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think
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quality
of the
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television
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content
will suffer. In my opinion, regulatory
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checks
should
be performed
to
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improve
the
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quality
of the
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programs
,
nevertheless
; both points will
be discussed
in the essay.

To commence with the
first
notion, it is
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clear
that an increasing
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number
of
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television
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programs
will provide more
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content
therefore
it will play a crucial role to enhance the knowledge base of the viewers.
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Moreover
it will provide a variety of
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content
which will teach the individual about various subjects. To cite an example, A recent survey conducted by
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times
of India revealed that the knowledge base of the individuals
was increased
by 60% after watching
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television
programs.

Shifting towards the second school of
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thought
,
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Many
believe that
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quality
of the
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content
will suffer as more quantity need to
be generated
in a short period of
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time
.
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Eventualy
, in a limited
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time
span,
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Tv
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program
directors need to produce a large
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number
of
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episodes
which will decrease the
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quality
of the
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program
.
For instance
, One research paper from Harvard University suggested that
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quality
of the
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tv
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programs
dropped by 45% when they released more than eight
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episodes
per week.

Having said the arguments and counter arguments, I would like to infer that
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checks
should
be implemented
in regular interval to curb the increasing
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number
of
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television
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programs
.
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Once
these
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checks
are
successfully
installed it will thereby
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improve
the
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quality
of the programs.

To conclude
, Although
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number
of
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television
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programs
will increase the knowledge of the individuals,
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some
still
feel that this rapid growth will depreciate the
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quality
of the
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tv
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episodes
as
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time
span is
extremely
low to create the
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content
.
However
, few regulatory
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checks
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must
be considered
in the development stage of the
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tv
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episodes
to enhance the
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quality
of the
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programs
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A number of tv programsion is growing. some people say that it is good while others say it affects the quality of tv program. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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