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Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes. v.2

Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes. v. 2
Safety is arguably the most important criteria when considering a place to live and work, and therefore adapting most modern and sophisticated safety measurements in the pre and post production department is a topic which requires immediate attention. I believe, for this to make happen, both the person who does construct as well as the government should adhere to some specific and scientific building codes. Firstly, let us look at the major factors which differentiate our style of living in the modern society as compared to that of the older society. People used to live in single storey buildings, unlike multi-storey apartments in the present. Additionally, the number of people accommodating to a single premise is several times larger than the last generation. Therefore the idea of having good quality in building construction cannot be compromised. Having said that, I believe, the foundation of this whole set of instructions has to be set up by the government. These mandatory requirements should meet the possibility of resolving general threats such as adulteration in the materials used, altered foundation requirements, improper fire safety amenities etc. The government should also make sure that the employees engaged in the process are professionals and hence they are able to make high-quality concrete structures which can meet the environmental natural hazards, as these incidents occur more frequently nowadays. On the contrary, the guidelines to the people who build their houses or other buildings are mostly considered to be influenced by personal choices. It can vary depending upon the finance they have, time and resources available to them. But having said that, the new trends like, using electronic safety equipment like surveillance cameras are very important too. In my opinion, the governments should set up a construction board aimed at the public to introduce and educate them, on the advanced choices available to them. In summary, a perfectly constructed building is a combination of hard-work and technology and it should be based on excellent government rules and personal choices.
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is
arguably
the most
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important
criteria when considering a place to
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live
and work, and
therefore
adapting most modern and sophisticated
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safety
measurements in the
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pre
and
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post production
department is a topic which requires immediate attention. I believe, for this to
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make
happen, both the person who does construct
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as well as
the
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government
should adhere to
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some
specific and scientific
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building
codes.

Firstly
,
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let
us look at the major factors which differentiate our style of living in the modern society as compared to that of the older society.
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People
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used
to
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live
in single
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storey
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buildings
, unlike
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multi-storey
apartments in the present.
Additionally
, the number of
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people
accommodating to a single premise is several times larger than the last generation.
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Therefore
the
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idea
of having
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good
quality in
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building
construction cannot
be compromised
. Having said that, I believe, the foundation of this whole set of instructions
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has to
be set
up by the
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government
. These mandatory requirements should
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meet
the possibility of resolving general threats such as adulteration in the materials
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used
, altered foundation requirements, improper fire
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safety
amenities etc. The
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government
should
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that the employees engaged in the process are professionals and
hence
they are able to
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make
high-quality concrete structures which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the environmental natural hazards, as these incidents occur more
frequently
nowadays.

On the contrary
, the guidelines to the
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people
who build their
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houses
or other
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buildings
are
mostly
considered to
be influenced
by personal choices. It can vary depending upon the finance they have, time and resources available to them.
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But
having said that, the new trends like, using electronic
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safety
equipment like surveillance cameras are
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very
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important
too. In my opinion, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
should set up a construction board aimed at the public to introduce and educate them, on the advanced choices available to them.

In summary, a
perfectly
constructed
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building
is a combination of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-work and technology and it should
be based
on excellent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and personal choices.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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