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A number of tertiary courses require students to undertake a period of unpaid work at art institution or organisation as part of their program. what are the advantages and disadvantages of the type of course requirement? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge. v.1

A number of tertiary courses require students to undertake a period of unpaid work at art institution or organisation as part of their program. what are the advantages and disadvantages of the type of course requirement? v. 1
A varied number of unpaid internships offer to undergrad as a part of their educational program at various companies. Many people believed that internship provides imperative opportunities for undergraduate and graduated students. However, it has some drawbacks, also. First of all, it is worth considering that the internship is a stepping stone to a successful life. Especially for an undergraduate student as he/she would experience a practical effort related to its educational program for example, A doctor has to do a house job at a particular hospital to gain practical experience for the treatment of patients. Secondly, In schooling, a pupil just learnt the theory and he/she doesn't know how to tackle with real life problems. So, these tertiary courses can also prosper the social and ethical values as well elaborate the communication skill. Lastly, the job opportunities comes up with practical experience because employment demands experience related to your program. On the other hand, There are some disadvantages of these tertiary courses. On the top of that, Some organisation gives grunt assignment to interne, due to this, It doesn't help them flourish their knowledge and skill. Secondly, some laboratories or agencies don't have appropriate appliances through which the observer would be able to gain the practical knowledge. For example, if a worker is a biological science student and he/she must require the relevant instrument through which they analyse different biological and chemical parameters. Finally, some organisation requires that worker do late night task to help the team, but it could be difficult for the women who belonged to rigorous family. To conclude, The internship institutes are best for all learners to distinguish themselves in today's competitive world. Furthermore, the only drawback of these task courses is the institution is inappropriately monitored and facilitated with everything that internee requires to gain the expertise to support his professionalism.
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companies
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people
believed that internship provides imperative opportunities for undergraduate and graduated students.
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, it has
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some
drawbacks,
also
.

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First of all
, it is worth considering that the internship is a stepping stone to a successful life.
Especially
for an undergraduate student as he/she would
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experience
a
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practical
effort related to its educational program
for example
, A doctor
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has to
do a
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house
job at a particular hospital to gain
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practical
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experience
for the treatment of patients.
Secondly
, In schooling, a pupil
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just
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learnt
the
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theory and
he/she doesn't know how to tackle with real life problems.
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So
, these tertiary courses can
also
prosper the social and ethical values
as well
elaborate the communication
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skill
.
Lastly
, the job opportunities
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comes
up with
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practical
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experience
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because
employment demands
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experience
related to your program.

On the other hand
, There are
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some
disadvantages of these tertiary courses. On the top of that,
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Some
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organisation
gives grunt assignment to
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interne
, due to this, It doesn't
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help
them flourish their knowledge and
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skill
.
Secondly
,
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some
laboratories or agencies don't have appropriate appliances through which the observer would be able to gain the
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practical
knowledge.
For example
, if a worker is a biological science
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student and
he/she
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must
require the relevant instrument through which they
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analyse
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different
biological and chemical parameters.
Finally
,
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some
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organisation
requires
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that worker do
late night task to
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help
the team,
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but
it could be difficult for the women who belonged to rigorous family.

To conclude
, The internship institutes are best for all learners to distinguish themselves in
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today
's competitive world.
Furthermore
, the
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only
drawback of these task courses is the institution is
inappropriately
monitored and facilitated with everything that internee requires to gain the expertise to support his professionalism.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A number of tertiary courses require students to undertake a period of unpaid work at art institution or organisation as part of their program. what are the advantages and disadvantages of the type of course requirement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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