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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe that it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe that it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 1
Environmental issues are common challenges faced by the governments in the world today. While some individuals believe that our surroundings issues should be treated internationally, some persons argue that the challenges be handled by each nation. In my opinion, I believe the should be treated locally. The rationales for these problems would be discussed intensively in below. On the one hand, One of the reasons the solution to environmental problems should be handled nationally is decision making are quickly executed. Quick actions are taken to provide solutions to challenging situations when a locality decides to look into its own problems. I think it helps to propel the government of the country nationwide to perform effectively and efficiently. To illustrate is a recent research conducted by shows that the current corona virus in the world today has made the governments of various nations, especially African countries, to brace up themselves to invent a vaccine in their country that would cure the virus in case any of their citizens gets infected. Another reason for the opinion is that the nation tends to be self reliant. The governments of various localities would able to depend solely on their own funds to solve these problems in place of acquiring loans and waiting for international aids from foreign organisations and so on. Some people notwithstanding, believe that environmental issues should be attended to with international scale. One reason is because funds are easily disbursed to meet sophisticated needs. These needs could be expensive projects that a nation on its own cannot accomplish by itself. For reference, It was recorded by CNN that the world health organisation, as well as Unicef gave a loan of about $26, 000, 000, 000 to the Nigerian government to buy amenities to fight again the terrorist group and other Isis group in the northern region of the country. In conclusion, despite the reasons why some people think that social problems should be solved by nations themselves because of the self benefits, as well as quicker decision making and I agree, certain individuals believe that it should be handled through international measures. All of these reasons have been discussed in the essay above.
Environmental issues are common challenges faced by the
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governments
in the world
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today
. While
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some
individuals
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believe
that our surroundings issues should
be treated
internationally
,
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some
persons argue that the challenges
be handled
by each
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nation
. In my opinion, I
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believe
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the
should
be treated
locally
. The rationales for these
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problems
would
be discussed
intensively
in below.

On the one hand, One of the
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reasons
the solution to environmental
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problems
should
be handled
nationally
is
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decision making
are
quickly
executed. Quick actions
are taken
to provide solutions to challenging situations when a locality decides to look into its
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own
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problems
. I
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think
it
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helps
to propel the
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government
of the country nationwide to perform
effectively
and
efficiently
. To illustrate is a recent research conducted by
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shows
that the
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current
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corona virus
in the world
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today
has made the
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governments
of various
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nations
,
especially
African countries, to brace up themselves to invent a vaccine in their country that would cure the virus in case any of their citizens
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gets
infected. Another
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reason
for the opinion is that the
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nation
tends to be
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self reliant
. The
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governments
of various localities
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would able
to depend
solely
on their
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own
funds to solve these
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problems
in place of acquiring loans and waiting for international aids from foreign
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organisations
and
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so
on.

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Some
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people
notwithstanding,
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believe
that environmental issues should
be attended
to with international scale. One
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reason
is
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because
funds are
easily
disbursed to
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meet
sophisticated needs. These needs could be expensive projects that a
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nation
on its
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own
cannot accomplish by itself. For reference, It
was recorded
by CNN that the world health
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organisation
,
as well
as
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Unicef
gave a loan of about $26, 000, 000, 000 to the Nigerian
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government
to
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buy
amenities to fight again the terrorist group and other Isis group in the northern region of the country.

In conclusion
, despite the
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reasons
why
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some
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people
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think
that social
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problems
should
be solved
by
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nations
themselves
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because
of the self benefits,
as well
as quicker
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
and I
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agree
, certain individuals
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believe
that it should
be handled
through international measures. All of these
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reasons
have
been discussed
in the essay above.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe that it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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