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A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used: Western medicine (using drugs and surgery), herbal medicine, acupuncture (using needles at certain points of the body), homoeopathy (using minute doses of poisons), and so on. How important is the patient’s mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment? v.2

A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used: Western medicine (using drugs and surgery), herbal medicine, acupuncture (using needles at certain points of the body), homoeopathy (using minute doses of poisons), and so on. How important is the patient’s mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment? v. 2
A wide range of medical treatments is available today. Patients may wonder which will be the most effective, and whether their own mental attitude to the type of treatment might affect its success. This essay will consider the second of these questions. Many people visit their doctor or go to hospital with complete trust in the expert care offered by conventional services. However, some people do not get a satisfactory result. For example, the drugs they are prescribed may have unpleasant side-effects. Their initial positive attitude towards their treatment does them little good. Similarly, those patients who choose alternative treatments over traditional medicine may find themselves disillusioned. Less rigorous qualification standards among alternative practitioners may mean that some healers give ineffective or damaging advice. The result, again, is that a patient who entered treatment with confidence leaves that treatment disillusioned. On the other hand, patients may try a style of treatment with some scepticism. A person used to conventional medicines and drugs may be suspicious of treatments based on diet and lifestyle changes. Yet if they follow such programs, they may in fact notice improvements in their condition, in spite of their scepticism. Equally, a patient opposed to conventional medicine may have an accident and be saved by the effective treatment of conventional emergency services. In conclusion, it appears that the mental attitude of the patient is not the most significant factor in determining the outcome of the treatment. Patients who enter treatment confidently may leave disillusioned while those who begin treatment sceptical of the results may find themselves surprised with what they have gained. Patients should seek the advantages which each style of care can offer.
A wide range of medical
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treatments
is available
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today
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Patients
may wonder which will be the most effective, and whether their
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own
mental attitude to the type of
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treatment
might affect its success. This essay will consider the second of these questions.

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people
visit their doctor or go to hospital with complete trust in the expert care offered by
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conventional
services.
However
,
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some
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people
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get
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are prescribed
may have unpleasant
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side-effects
. Their initial
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positive
attitude towards their
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treatment
does them
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little
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good
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Similarly
, those
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patients
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who
choose alternative
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treatments
over traditional medicine may find themselves disillusioned. Less rigorous qualification standards among alternative practitioners may mean that
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some
healers give ineffective or damaging advice. The result, again, is that a
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patient
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who
entered
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treatment
with confidence
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leaves
that
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treatment
disillusioned.

On the other hand
,
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patients
may try a style of
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treatment
with
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some
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scepticism
. A person
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used
to
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conventional
medicines and drugs may be suspicious of
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treatments
based on diet and lifestyle
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changes
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their
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scepticism
.
Equally
, a
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patient
opposed to
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conventional
medicine may have an accident and
be saved
by the effective
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treatment
of
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conventional
emergency services.

In conclusion
, it appears that the mental attitude of the
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patient
is not the most significant factor in determining the outcome of the
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treatment
.
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Patients
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who
enter
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treatment
confidently
may
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leave
disillusioned while those
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who
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begin
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treatment
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sceptical
of the results may find themselves surprised with what they have gained.
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Patients
should seek the advantages which each style of care can offer.
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Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used: Western medicine (using drugs and surgery), herbal medicine, acupuncture (using needles at certain points of the body), homoeopathy (using minute doses of poisons), and so on. How important is the patient’s mental attitude towards his/her treatment in determining the effectiveness of the treatment? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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