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1 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used Western medicine using drugs and surgery herbal medicine acupuncture using needles at certain points of the body homeopathy using minut v.1

1 A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used Western medicine using drugs and surgery herbal medicine acupuncture using needles at certain points of the body homeopathy using minut v. 1
Happiness indeed plays an essential role in life, and it means different from person to person. While happiness is hard to describe, there are different factors essential to help to get happiness. Happiness is hard to define because every person insight towards life is unique and enjoying life in their way. Some people believe that self-achievement and status in society satisfies them. For example, people who become self-dependent, they do all their stuff themselves and achieve success in life. On the other hand, some people prefer to spend time with family in order to feel happy, these people connect and share with family members as a result get emotional support from others. Therefore, everyone perspective would be different to achieve happiness. However, there are other reasons essential to feel happier in life. Firstly, everyone would like to have their basic needs covered, such as food, clothes, housing, etc. If someone does not have food, that person would not be able to survive even in case of housing cost of living is higher in cities; it is not easy to afford house unless inherited from parents. Secondly, individuals feel satisfaction when they get success in their career and earn a salary, which covers their necessities so that they will be capable of improving their reputation in society. Finally, everyone has a life goal and doing activities which help them to feel good and self sufficient. In conclusion, everyone would have a different meaning for being happy, and they find happiness in several factors also.
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, and it means
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to
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person
. While happiness is
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hard
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describe
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different
factors essential to
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help
to
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get
happiness.

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hard
to define
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because
every
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insight towards
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is unique and enjoying
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life
in their way.
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Some
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people
believe that self-achievement and status in society satisfies them.
For example
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people
who become self-dependent, they do all their stuff themselves and achieve success in
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life
.
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,
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some
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people
prefer to spend time with family in order to
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feel
happy, these
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people
connect and share with family members
as a result
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get
emotional support from others.
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,
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everyone
perspective would be
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different
to achieve happiness.

However
, there are other reasons essential to
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feel
happier in
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life
.
Firstly
,
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everyone
would like to have their basic needs covered, such as food, clothes, housing, etc. If someone does not have food, that
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person
would not be able to survive even in case of housing cost of living is higher in cities; it is not easy to afford
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house
unless inherited from parents.
Secondly
, individuals
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feel
satisfaction when they
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get
success in their career and earn a salary, which covers their necessities
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so
that they will be capable of improving their reputation in society.
Finally
,
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everyone
has a
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life
goal and doing activities which
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help
them to
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feel
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good
and
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self sufficient
.

In conclusion
,
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everyone
would have a
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different
meaning for being happy, and they find happiness in several factors
also
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1 A number of different medical traditions are now widely known and used Western medicine using drugs and surgery herbal medicine acupuncture using needles at certain points of the body homeopathy using minut v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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