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A lot of social problems can be related to teenagers these days. Some feel that this is because parents are not able to spend enough time to take care of their teenage child. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

A lot of social problems can be related to teenagers these days. Some feel that this is because parents are not able to spend enough time to take care of their teenage child. v. 5
At present time, teenagers are causing many social difficulties. Some think that it is happening due to spending few time of parents with their children and they are engage with their own job. I agree with this statement because the parents are busy with building own career and they are most likely to support their family financially. Everyone wants to create his own background without depending anyone. The major means of creating base is earning money and today' s generation is tend to do so. So, everybody want to study more and more so that they can figure out an easy way to find job for supporting themselves financially. Sometimes mothers do not leave their job after giving birth of a child. Thus, child do not get enough cear of its mother and grow up with loneliness. When this child become younger, he or she tend to do anything as they want, it might good or bad for society, and bad behaviour causes problem in society. In other words, having job holder parents of a child get less guidance of parents, who work all day long in an institution, not get that much time to give their child. The parents sometimes ignore their child because of less time. For example, in my neighbourhood, some mothers and fathers both do job and stay minor proportion of their time in their home and with their children. Logically, their children get less guidance and get out from home to make noise and shouting in our roads which disturb the surrounding people. Some people also complained about this to those parents in spite of not getting any response. As a result of this, whole society is concerne about children and forcing them to leave the society. In a nutshell, parents spending less time with children and more busy with their job are the main reasons of rising anti-social behaviour amongst children, because every parent busy to build their own background and give financial support to their family.
At present
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time
,
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teenagers
are causing
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many
social difficulties.
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Some
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think
that it is happening due to spending few
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time
of
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parents
with their
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children and
they are
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engage
with their
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own
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job
. I
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agree
with this statement
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because
the
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parents
are busy with building
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own
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career and
they are most likely to support their family
financially
.

Everyone wants to create his
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own
background without
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depending
anyone. The major means of creating base is earning money and
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today&
#039; s generation is
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tend
to do
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so
.
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So
, everybody
The pronoun 'everybody' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "wants", "wanted".
want
to study more and more
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so
that they can figure out an easy way to find
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job
for supporting themselves
financially
.
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Sometimes
mothers do not
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leave
their
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job
after giving birth of a
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child
.
Thus
,
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child
do not
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get
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enough
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cear
of its mother and grow up with loneliness. When this
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child
become younger, he or she
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tend
to do anything as they want, it might
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good
or
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bad
for society, and
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bad
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behaviour
causes problem in society.

In other words
, having
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job
holder
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parents
of a
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child
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get
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less
guidance of
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parents
, who work all day long in an institution, not
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get
that much
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time
to give their
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child
. The
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parents
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sometimes
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ignore
their
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child
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because
of
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less
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time
.
For example
, in my
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neighbourhood
,
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some
mothers and fathers both do
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job
and stay minor proportion of their
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time
in their home and with their
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children
.
Logically
, their
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children
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get
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less
guidance and
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get
out from home to
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make
noise and shouting in our roads which disturb the surrounding
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people
.
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Some
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people
also
complained about this to those
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parents
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in spite of
not getting any response.
As a result
of this, whole society is
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concerne
about
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children
and forcing them to
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leave
the society.

In a nutshell,
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parents
spending
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less
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time
with
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children
and more busy with their
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job
are the main reasons of rising anti-social
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behaviour
amongst
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children
,
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because
every
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parent
busy to build their
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own
background and give financial support to their family.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS essay A lot of social problems can be related to teenagers these days. Some feel that this is because parents are not able to spend enough time to take care of their teenage child. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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