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A local magazine editor has asked readers opinion. Write a letter to magazine editor. Describe what made you to choose this magazine? What do you like or dislike about it? What improvements do you want to see? v.1

A local magazine editor has asked readers opinion. Write a letter to magazine editor. Describe what made you to choose this magazine? What do you like or dislike about it? What improvements do you want to see? v. 1
Nowadays, environmental issues have become a major topic of discussion among people and governments. Many individuals / people argue that environmental protection can be achieved only by the governments or large business conglomerates. I strongly disagree with this opinion as small movements can have a big impact. Also individual effort for the protection of the environment will be highly appreciated and supported by the public and this will increase the momentum. Even though, the majority of individuals think individual efforts are useless, they have a great impact on a bigger picture. For example, in the waste management process segregating the household garbage items will take only a few minutes for the person who is sending the waste materials to the government agencies, but it provides a greater advantage for the government bodies since it is easier for them to process the properly separated waste materials. If everyone thinks that they cannot make any difference, there will not be any positive move. Therefore, it is important for everyone to do whatever they can to protect the environment. In addition, if individual efforts to protect the environment are highlighted through the proper channel, they will inspire many more people to follow the same path. For example, in 2017, Mr. Prashant, the then district collector of Kozhikode, took the personal initiative to clean a public lake in the district and he publicized / promoted the campaign on his Facebook page. After hearing about this, hundreds of local community persons joined the movement and made it a success. If that person was waiting for the government to take action, this would not happen. This clearly shows that any minor initiatives, especially for the betterment of the environment will receive a huge support from the public if we publicize it properly. To conclude, small efforts made by the individuals for the protection of the environment certainly make a difference and encourage others also to contribute. In the light of this we can strongly oppose the given argument which underestimates individual efforts, and clearly state that individual contribution is as much important as the support provided by government bodies and multinational companies.
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people
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governments
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individuals
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people
argue that environmental protection can
be achieved
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only
by the
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governments
or large business conglomerates. I
strongly
disagree with this opinion as
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small
movements can have a
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big
impact.
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Also
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individual
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effort
for the protection of the
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environment
will be
highly
appreciated and supported by the public and this will increase the momentum.

Even though
, the majority of
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individuals
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think
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individual
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efforts
are useless, they have a great impact on a bigger picture.
For example
, in the waste management process segregating the household garbage items will take
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only
a few minutes for the person who is sending the waste materials to the
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government
agencies,
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but
it provides a greater advantage for the
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government
bodies since it is easier for them to process the
properly
separated waste materials. If everyone
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thinks
that they cannot
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make
any difference, there will not be any
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positive
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move
.
Therefore
, it is
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important
for everyone to do whatever they can to protect the environment.

In addition
, if
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individual
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efforts
to protect the
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environment
are highlighted
through the proper channel, they will inspire
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many
more
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people
to follow the same path.
For example
, in 2017, Mr. Prashant, the then district collector of Kozhikode, took the personal initiative to clean a public lake in the
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district and
he publicized / promoted the campaign on his Facebook page. After hearing about this, hundreds of local community persons
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joined
the movement and made it a success. If that person was waiting for the
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government
to take action, this would not happen. This
clearly
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shows
that any minor initiatives,
especially
for the betterment of the
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environment
will receive a huge support from the public if we publicize it
properly
.

To conclude
,
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small
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efforts
made by the
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individuals
for the protection of the
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environment
certainly
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make
a difference and encourage others
also
to contribute. In the light of this we can
strongly
oppose the
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given
argument which underestimates
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individual
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efforts
, and
clearly
state that
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individual
contribution is as much
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important
as the support provided by
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government
bodies and multinational
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companies
.
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IELTS essay A local magazine editor has asked readers opinion. Write a letter to magazine editor. Describe what made you to choose this magazine? What do you like or dislike about it? What improvements do you want to see? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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