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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v.9

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 9
A large portion of demographic believe that animals should not be used for our livelihood because they are also living creatures have a right to live, whilst there is in abundance who have a strong urge of utilizing animals for their fundamental necessity. In my opinion, morally it is not right to kill animals, but dependent up to a certain extent is natural. Every living creature has their birth rights to live. And that makes a vast number of humans to be sympathetic towards them as animals cannot express their agony. For instance a lactating cow is not allowed to feed her calf at content, as the milk is supposed to make a good dairy business for a man and perhaps it is immoral eventually No human would do that to their infants. On the counter side when it comes to survival it becomes natural tendency to depend on any life supporting agent. Extreme climates makes hard to grow vegetation and people tend to rely on animals for food, skin etc. for example, people living in deserts cannot grow vegetation apparently makes them use meat as a prime source of food and camels as transportation. Summing up as we see some facts which purely served a business purpose for mankind in turn makes me support the animal’s right, it is not true to every extent, as people will need animals and their products at many aspects of life. So I end up suggesting the use of animals up to considerably limit and not exploit them.
A large portion of demographic believe that
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animals
should not be
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used
for our livelihood
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because
they are
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living creatures have a
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right
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live
, whilst there is in abundance who have a strong urge of utilizing
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animals
for their fundamental necessity. In my opinion,
morally
it is not
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right
to kill
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animals
,
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but
dependent up to a certain extent is natural.

Every living creature has their birth
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rights
to
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live
. And that
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makes
a vast number of humans to be sympathetic towards them as
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animals
cannot express their agony.
For instance
a lactating cow is not
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allowed
to feed her calf at content, as the milk
is supposed
to
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make
a
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good
dairy business for a
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man
and perhaps it is immoral
eventually
No human would do that to their infants.

On the counter side when it
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comes
to survival it becomes natural tendency to depend on any life supporting agent. Extreme climates
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makes
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hard
to grow vegetation and
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people
tend to rely on
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animals
for food, skin etc.
for example
,
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people
living in deserts cannot grow vegetation
apparently
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makes
them
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use
meat as a prime source of food and camels as transportation.

Summing up as we
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see
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some
facts which
purely
served a business purpose for mankind in turn
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makes
me support the
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animal’s
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right
, it is not true to every extent, as
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people
will need
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animals
and their products at
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many
aspects of life.
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So
I
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end
up suggesting the
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use
of
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animals
up to
considerably
limit and not exploit them.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
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