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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. v. 1
Smoking in public areas is banned in many areas over the globe. This essay totally upholds the prohibition of smoking in common areas, and that is in order to protect the society’s health, and to avoid setting inappropriate role models for the new generations. Firstly, this essay will shed the light on how relevant laws could enhance the public health and secondly, we will discuss how that could dissuade youngsters from being a future smokers. To begin with, enacting legislations to prevent smoking in places such as parks, zoos or children playgrounds is an important factor for maintaining a healthy society, this is because the secondhand smoke negatively impacts the people around, and the consequences vary from triggering asthma fits to causing lung cancer. For example, the World Health Organisation (WHO) recorded in the last decade serveral new asthma cases caused mainly by the repetitive exposure to secondhand smoking. Another important factor is that enforcing restrictions on public smoking effectively participates in decimating the levels of teenage smoking, because adolescents will not regard the smoking as a normal process prevailing in the society. This is to say that when teenagers sees smoking is common almost everywhere that could increase the likelihood of them picking up such bad habits, especially when they find a great percentage of the available role models engaging in such activities. As a vivid example, a research paper that was published in 2016 by The Guardian, showed that enforcing legislations that banned smoking in multiple public areas in England actually reduced the percentage of young smokers by 16%. To conclude, this essay supports the criminalizing of public smoking because it enhances the overall society health, in addition to lowering the figures of smokers under the age of 18. It is recommended that litigators around the word put forward similar laws, and governments should not only support, but enforce them as well.
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areas
over the globe. This essay
totally
upholds the prohibition of
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smoking
in common
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areas
, and
that is
in order to protect the society’s
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health
, and to avoid setting inappropriate role models for the new generations.
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, this essay will shed the light on how relevant laws could enhance the
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public
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health
and
secondly
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smokers
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prevent
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smoking
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important
factor for maintaining a healthy society,

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because
the secondhand smoke
negatively
impacts the
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people
around, and the consequences vary from triggering asthma fits to causing lung cancer.
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, the World
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Health
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Organisation
(WHO) recorded in the last decade
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new asthma cases caused
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important
factor is that enforcing restrictions on
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public
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,
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because
adolescents will not regard the
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smoking
as a normal process prevailing in the society. This is to say that when
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teenagers
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sees
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smoking
is common almost everywhere that could increase the likelihood of them picking up such
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bad
habits,
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when they find a great percentage of the available role models engaging in such activities. As a vivid example, a research paper that
was published
in 2016 by The Guardian,
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that enforcing
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reduced
the percentage of young smokers by 16%.

To conclude
, this essay supports the criminalizing of
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public
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smoking
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because
it enhances the
overall
society
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health
,
in addition
to lowering the figures of smokers under the age of 18. It
is recommended
that litigators around the word put forward similar laws, and
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governments
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enforce them
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13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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