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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 6
The problem of animal rights has provoked in the recent year. Discussion has centered whether animals ought not to suffer from the exploitation of human or humans have right to use animals in their needs including provision of food and research. Both two sides are discussed before I give my opinion. On the other hand, animals play an important role in research because that can ensure the precise of products or study before publishing and discourage the least other sides. For example, in complex surgery, doctors or experts need to do experiments on animals in order to have some results or action and consider before taking action on human. Besides testing on human in cosmetics industry is banned so testing on animals is the best choice. Moreover, animals are main resource for food because they provide a certain source of nutrition and energy. Especially, in some areas such as the ethnic group, the locals having a low salary job must hunt animals so as to manage their life. On the other hand, it is acceptable that animals who are born and exist have the same rights as human. They should not be behave badly and should live with humans to support each other. It is proved that when humans grow up a pet and live together, it helps people to reduce stress and the capicity of cancer. In the world, there are a lot of situation that doctors use animals treatment. When patients suffer from disorders or expression, unability, they live with a pet who enable them to have better life and become more optimistic. Besides, animals create the natural environments. If human continue hunting animals such as wild animals and destroy forests, the nature and the fresh air will disappear, leading to lose the nature and the pollution. As a result, misusing animals not only lose the nature but also make people behave unnormally. In conclusion, as for as I am concerned that animals have rights to live and humans should respect them. However, people can limit the use of animals on research and replace food from meat to vegetables and vitamins.
The problem of
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animal
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rights
has provoked in the recent year. Discussion has centered whether
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animals
ought not to suffer from the exploitation of
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human
or
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humans
have
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right
to
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use
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animals
in their needs including provision of food and research. Both two sides
are discussed
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before
I give my opinion.

On the
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other
hand,
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animals
play an
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important
role in research
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because
that can ensure
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the precise of
products or study
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before
publishing and discourage the least
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other
sides.
For example
, in complex surgery, doctors or experts need to do experiments on
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animals
in order to have
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some
results or action and consider
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before
taking action on
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human
.
Besides
testing on
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human
in cosmetics industry
is banned
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so
testing on
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animals
is the best choice.
Moreover
,
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animals
are main resource for food
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because
they provide a certain source of nutrition and energy.
Especially
, in
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some
areas such as the ethnic group, the locals having a low salary job
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must
hunt
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animals
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so as to
manage their life.

On the
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other
hand, it is acceptable that
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animals
who
are born
and exist have the same
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rights
as
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human
. They should not be
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behave
badly
and should
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live
with
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humans
to support each
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other
. It
is proved
that when
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humans
grow up a pet and
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live
together, it
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helps
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people
to
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reduce
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stress
and the
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capicity
of cancer. In the world, there are
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a lot of situation
that doctors
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use
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animals
treatment. When patients suffer from disorders or expression,
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unability
, they
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live
with a pet who enable them to have better life and become more optimistic.
Besides
,
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animals
create the natural environments. If
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human
continue hunting
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animals
such as wild
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animals
and
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destroy
forests, the nature and the fresh air will disappear, leading to lose the nature and the pollution.
As a result
, misusing
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animals
not
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only
lose the nature
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but
also
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make
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people
behave
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unnormally
.

In conclusion
, as for as I
am concerned
that
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animals
have
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rights
to
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live
and
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humans
should respect them.
However
,
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people
can limit the
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use
of
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animals
on research and replace food from meat to vegetables and vitamins.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
6
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