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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 4
In this modern world, the perspectives of how best to treat animals differ among people. While some think that animals should be treated equally as humans and have similar rights, others opine that humans use animals in terms of meeting their diverse needs such as food and research. This essay will analyze both views and provide an opinion. On the one hand, proponents of animal exploitation argue that humans are the most important earthly creatures. If ensuring the survival of human race means experimenting on as more animals as possible, then this should be done. Example of such opinion can be seen in various research laboratories all over the world where drug testing is initially done on animals before human trials are carried out. Should these animals not respond positively to these experimental trials, they are not carried out on human beings. This example clearly shows that human beings are more superior than animals and thus subject to exploitation. On the other hand, those who think animals have equal right as humans opine that most of the reasons for predating on these animals are unnecessary. They argue, for instance, that most of the essential food nutrients needed by humans can be derived from fruits and vegetables which have even been scientifically proven to be more beneficial than animal products. To illustrate, in 2010, the Guardian newspaper, which is a reputable news magazine in Nigeria, published a study, carried out by the Nigerian Medical Association, to access the risk of cardiovascular disease among vegans and non-vegans. The study showed that there was double risk of developing cardiovascular disease among non-vegans when compared to their vegan counterparts who consumed more of plant product. Hence, it is clear that human beings do not compulsorily have to feed on animals. To conclude, although some people argue that using animals for food and research can be considered ethical. I am of the opinion that both animals and humans can have an enduring symbiotic relationship which will ultimately benefit both ends. It is thus hoped that steps will be taken to improve the rights of animals to ensure continuity of this race.
In this modern world, the perspectives of how best to treat
animals
differ among
people
. While
some
think
that
animals
should
be treated
equally as
humans
and have similar rights, others opine that
humans
use
animals
in terms of meeting their diverse needs such as food and research. This essay will analyze both views and provide an opinion.

On the one hand, proponents of
animal
exploitation argue that
humans
are the most
important
earthly
creatures. If ensuring the survival of
human
race means experimenting on as more
animals
as possible, then this should
be done
. Example of such opinion can be
seen
in various research laboratories all over the world where drug testing is
initially
done on
animals
before
human
trials
are carried
out. Should these
animals
not respond
positively
to these experimental trials, they are not carried out on
human
beings. This example
clearly
shows
that
human
beings are
more superior than
animals
and
thus
subject to exploitation.

On the other hand
, those who
think
animals
have equal right as
humans
opine that most of the reasons for predating on these
animals
are unnecessary. They argue,
for instance
, that most of the essential food nutrients needed by
humans
can
be derived
from fruits and vegetables which have even been
scientifically
proven to be more beneficial than
animal
products. To illustrate, in 2010, the Guardian newspaper, which is a reputable news magazine in Nigeria, published a study, carried out by the Nigerian Medical Association, to access the
risk
of cardiovascular disease among vegans and non-vegans. The study
showed
that there was double
risk
of developing cardiovascular disease among non-vegans when compared to their vegan counterparts who consumed more of plant product.
Hence
, it is
clear
that
human
beings do not
compulsorily
have to
feed on animals.

To conclude
, although
some
people
argue that using
animals
for food and research can
be considered
ethical. I am of the opinion that both
animals
and
humans
can have an enduring symbiotic relationship which will
ultimately
benefit both ends. It is
thus
hoped that steps will
be taken
to
improve
the rights of
animals
to ensure continuity of this race.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6
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