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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.12

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 12
In this modern world, the perspectives on how best to treat animals differ among people. While some think that animals should be treated equally as humans and have similar rights, others opine that humans use animals in terms of meeting their diverse needs such as food and research. This essay will analyze both views and provide an opinion. On the one hand, proponents of animal exploitation argue that humans are the most important earthly creatures. If ensuring the survival of the human race means experimenting on as more animals as possible, then this should be done. Example of such can be seen in various research laboratories all over the world where drug testing is initially done on animals before human trials are carried out. Should these animals not respond positively to these experimental trials, they are not carried out on human beings. This example justifies the position of those who believe that humans are at liberty to choose what they do to animals. On the other hand, those who think animals have equal right as humans opine that animals feel pain and loss as humans do too. This trait has been observed in animal documentaries shown on major television channels such as Nat Geo Wild that these animals express signs of pain when they are hurt either by humans or fellow animals. They are even sometimes seen to mourn their loved ones who have passed on when such happen. These reactions are similar to what obtains in the human race when such occurrences happen to them. It is thus clear why it is thought that animals should have similar rights as humans. To conclude, although some people argue that using animals for food and research can be considered ethical. I believe that both animals and humans can have an enduring symbiotic relationship, which will ultimately benefit both ends. It is thus hoped that steps will be taken to improve the rights of animals to ensure continuity of this race.
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differ among
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. While
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think
that
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animals
should
be treated
Use either "equally" or "as" on its own. When comparing two nouns, use "just as".
equally as
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humans
and have similar
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rights
, others opine that
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humans
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use
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animals
in terms of meeting their diverse needs such as food and research. This essay will analyze both views and provide an opinion.

On the one hand, proponents of
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animal
exploitation argue that
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humans
are the most
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important
earthly
creatures. If ensuring the survival of the
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human
race means experimenting on as more
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animals
as possible, then this should
be done
. Example of such can be
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seen
in various research laboratories all over the world where drug testing is
initially
done on
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animals
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before
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human
trials
are carried
out. Should these
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animals
not respond
positively
to these experimental trials, they are not carried out on
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human
beings. This example justifies the position of those who believe that
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humans
are at liberty to choose what they do to animals.

On the other hand
, those who
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think
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animals
have equal
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right
as
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humans
opine that
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animals
feel pain and loss as
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humans
do too. This trait has
been observed
in
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animal
documentaries shown on major television channels such as Nat Geo Wild that these
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animals
express signs of pain when they
are hurt
either by
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humans
or fellow
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animals
. They are even
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sometimes
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seen
to mourn their
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loved
ones who have passed on when such happen. These reactions are similar to what obtains in the
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human
race when such occurrences happen to them. It is
thus
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clear
why it is
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thought
that
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animals
should have similar
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rights
as humans.

To conclude
, although
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some
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people
argue that using
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animals
for food and research can
be considered
ethical. I believe that both
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animals
and
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humans
can have an enduring symbiotic relationship, which will
ultimately
benefit both ends. It is
thus
hoped that steps will
be taken
to
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improve
the
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rights
of
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animals
to ensure continuity of this race.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same right as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 12

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  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
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