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A growing number of people feel animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both the views and give your opinion v.2

A growing number of people feel animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. 2
Animals have been always a hot topic among people to discuss about. It is believed by few that animals ought not to be exploited by humans as they have equal rights like humans do. Although others argue humans should use animals, for fulfilment of their personal desires such food and testing purposes. This essay will delve in both the sides of the arguments and outline my opinion. To begin with, increasing amount of people think that animal living rights should be respected just as humans’ lives are. This means that even if animals cannot take any action for their own good, then humans should step in to do so. As slaughtering animals is a threat to the whole food chain, when they are killed excessively. Moreover, many species are endangered because of over human consumption of meat, so it is indispensable to regulate restriction on their killings, even they have a right live peacefully with their families. For example, in China to eat, poach or hurt endangered animal in the country is considered illegal. If such laws are implemented, then people will deter to damage animals. Therefore, they are not only living things just like humans, but also have emotional feelings. However, on the contrary, human requirements need to be fulfilled by allowing to eat animals and using them for new research. Meat is an essential part of meal in many countries which gives people a reason for the survival. Also, animals are clinically tested by scientists for their new inventions to the human beings. Whereas they ensure that minimum risk cost to them instead of implying this to human lives, which certainly means human lives are more valuable than animals. If animals are used mainly for satisfying the human hunger and crucial testing, then a balance between the needs and their lives can be attained. In conclusion, it is commonly believed by people that animals have equal right to live rather than being killed or tested for fulfilling needs of humans, which is acceptable by a few. As people may differ in their opinions, I strongly believe that animals are highly imperative for the human consumption, as well as their lives are not as precious as human life is, so texting them for medical purpose ought to be accepted.
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have been always a hot topic among
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people
to
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discuss about.
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is believed
by few that
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animals
ought not to
be exploited
by
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humans
as they have equal
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rights
like
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humans
do. Although others argue
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humans
should
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use
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animals
, for
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fulfilment
of their personal desires such food and testing purposes. This essay will delve in both the sides of the arguments and outline my opinion.

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begin
with, increasing amount of
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people
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think
that
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animal
living
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rights
should
be respected
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just
as
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humans’
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lives
are. This means that even if
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animals
cannot take any action for their
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own
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good
, then
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humans
should step in to do
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so
. As slaughtering
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animals
is a threat to the whole food chain, when they
are killed
excessively
.
Moreover
,
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many
species
are endangered
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because
of over
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human
consumption of meat,
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so
it is indispensable to regulate restriction on their killings, even they have a
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right
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live
peacefully
with their families.
For example
, in China to eat, poach or hurt endangered
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animal
in the country
is considered
illegal. If such laws
are implemented
, then
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people
will deter to damage
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animals
.
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, they are not
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only
living things
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like
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humans
,
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but
also
have emotional feelings.

However
,
on the contrary
,
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human
requirements need to
be fulfilled
by allowing to eat
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animals
and using them for new research. Meat is an essential part of meal in
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many
countries which gives
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people
a reason for the survival.
Also
,
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animals
are
clinically
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tested
by scientists for their new inventions to the
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human
beings. Whereas they ensure that minimum
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risk
cost to them
instead
of implying this to
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human
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lives
, which
certainly
means
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human
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lives
are more valuable than
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animals
. If
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animals
are
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used
mainly
for satisfying the
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human
hunger and crucial testing, then a balance between the needs and their
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lives
can
be attained
.

In conclusion
, it is
commonly
believed by
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people
that
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animals
have equal
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right
to
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live
rather
than
being killed
or
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tested
for fulfilling needs of
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humans
, which is acceptable by a few. As
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people
may differ in their opinions, I
strongly
believe that
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animals
are
highly
imperative for the
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human
consumption,
as well
as their
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lives
are not as precious as
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human
life is,
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so
texting them for medical purpose ought to be
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accepted
.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
380 words
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