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Some people call for one unified language across the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v.2

Some people call for one unified language across the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v. 2
Today, we are living in a global community. Therefore, to address the needs of this globalization, people sometimes raise voice for the implementation of a globalized lingual system. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of the this popular belief by using the examples of Oxford University research and Times Magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims. On the one hand, there are the few benefits of becoming a monolingual. Firstly, it is easier to understand such cultures, which we are not aware of because of their complex foreign linguistic vocabulary. Secondly, it is convenient for the people to address each other in case of any need. For example, Oxford University in 2016 researched about the future outputs of a globalized speaking system and find out that it will burst all the psychological barriers of superiority, which arises because of the bilingualism. So from this example, it is clear that a singular linguistic idea of the globe is the need of the day. On the other hand, a unified mother tongue approach is also associated with a couple of issues. Firstly, most of the people are deeply influenced by their cultural roots and they don’t want to lose their ancestors’ mother tongue. Secondly, the mother tongue unification will affect the intelligence levels of the new generation as the bilinguals are supposed to be more intellectual. Similarly, a survey of Times Magazine will address the same issue and find out that 60% people agree that the bilingual people are more intelligent as compared to the monolinguals. So from this example, it is clear that it’s difficult to implement a unified lingual system because people are not willing for this change. To conclude, the monolingual approach for the globe is a beneficial approach, but it’s difficult for the people to leave their cultural influences which are attached to that language. In the future, it’s better if the world will also honour the importance of cultural languages instead of uniting the world on a single speaking platform.
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people
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popular belief by using the
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of Oxford University research and Times Magazine survey to demonstrate the points and support the claims.

On the one hand, there are the few benefits of becoming a monolingual.
Firstly
, it is easier to understand such cultures, which we are not aware of
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of their complex foreign linguistic vocabulary.
Secondly
, it is convenient for the
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people
to address each other in case of any need. For
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example
, Oxford University in 2016 researched about the future outputs of a globalized speaking system and find out that it will
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burst
all the psychological barriers of superiority, which arises
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because
of the bilingualism.
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from this
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clear
that a singular linguistic
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of the globe is the need of the day.

On the other hand
, a unified mother tongue approach is
also
associated with a couple of issues.
Firstly
, most of the
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people
are
deeply
influenced by their cultural
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roots and
they don’t want to lose their ancestors’ mother tongue.
Secondly
, the mother tongue unification will affect the intelligence levels of the new generation as the bilinguals
are supposed
to be more intellectual.
Similarly
, a survey of Times Magazine will address the same issue and find out that 60%
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agree
that the bilingual
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are more intelligent as compared to the monolinguals.
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from this
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, it is
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that it’s difficult to implement a unified lingual system
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because
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are not willing for this
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but
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to
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their cultural influences which
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to that language. In the future, it’s better if the world will
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honour
the importance of cultural languages
instead
of uniting the world on a single speaking platform.
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IELTS essay Some people call for one unified language across the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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