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A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v. 2
The unusual appearance of today’s buildings and construction has been a widespread concern for almost everyone with some claiming that such architectures are destroying our current living space, while others believe that they can possibly make our world more varied and interesting. This essay will discuss both sides of the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who support the construction of bizarre architectures point out various advantages that these buildings can bring to a town or city. Foremost among them is that some of those structures have really become an iconic landmark, which attracts thousands of both domestic and international tourists on a yearly basis and add greatly to the growth of the local economy. Examples can be seen in many modern conurbation areas such as the Marina Bay Sands hotel in Singapore or the Sydney Opera House in Australia. Another argument is that such buildings symbolize the creativeness or imagination of human beings. Without these symbolic figures, our modern world would become more tedious and less captivating. On the other hand, opponents of so-called ugly up-to-date buildings often argue that such constructions might lead to the destruction of an inner city’s architectural planning. They highlight many cases where odd structures were supposed to add diversity and interest to a town, but failed entirely when the construction was finished. For instance, the Elephant Building in Bangkok was thought to become an outstanding feature of the city, but it turned out to be one of the ugliest structures in the world. In those circumstances, freestyle outlandish buildings could become a huge drawback to an urban area and in my opinion, it would be a waste of money if a structure does not achieve its original objective. In conclusion, there are contradicting views about the role of peculiar figures in our towns and cities, but it seems to me that the local council should take those constructions into meticulous consideration before making their final decision.
The unusual appearance of
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today
’s
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buildings
and
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construction
has been a widespread concern for almost everyone with
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some
claiming that such architectures are destroying our
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current
living space, while others believe that they can
possibly
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make
our world more varied and interesting. This essay will discuss both sides of the debate, and give a concluding view.

On the one hand, those who support the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
of bizarre architectures point out various advantages that these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
can bring to a town or city. Foremost among them is that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of those
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structures
have
really
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become
an iconic landmark, which attracts thousands of both domestic and international tourists on a yearly basis and
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add
greatly
to the growth of the local economy. Examples can be
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seen
in
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many
modern conurbation areas such as the Marina Bay Sands hotel in Singapore or the Sydney Opera
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House
in Australia. Another argument is that such
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buildings
symbolize the creativeness or imagination of human beings. Without these symbolic figures, our modern world would
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become
more tedious and less captivating.

On the other hand
, opponents of
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so
-called ugly up-to-date
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buildings
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often
argue that such
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constructions
might lead to the destruction of an inner city’s architectural planning. They highlight
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many
cases where odd
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structures
were supposed
to
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add
diversity and interest to a town,
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but
failed
entirely
when the
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construction
was finished
.
For instance
, the Elephant
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Building
in Bangkok was
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thought
to
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become
an outstanding feature of the city,
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but
it turned out to be one of the ugliest
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structures
in the world. In those circumstances, freestyle outlandish
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buildings
could
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become
a huge drawback to an urban area and in my opinion, it would be a waste of money if a
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structure
does not achieve its original objective.

In conclusion
, there are contradicting views about the role of peculiar figures in our towns and
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cities
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it seems to me that the local council should take those
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constructions
into meticulous consideration
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before
making their final decision.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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