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A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc. ). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v.2

A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc. ). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v. 2
Nowadays, the responsibilities of the government are being debated quite a lot by the people and human rights activists. The state role should only be limited, restricted and confined to few sectors or it should cover every aspect of their citizens and residents’ well-being is a topic of great debate. It has been argued that the government should only be accountable for developing country’s military capabilities and infrastructure enhancement or it should be responsible for other important facilities i. e. education, medical, social protection as well. I strongly believe that all the aspects of life associated with state citizens should be directly undertaken, developed, maintained and operated by the state authorities. This argument will be proven by taking into account availability of resources with government and monopoly by private entities and individuals. Firstly, the funds and financing available by the state is substantially high giving them the cushion to allocated funds and projects for every sector according to its requirements. For instance, the state collects the tax from its citizens on the reason and commitment that the taxpayer’s money will again be spent by utilising on the development and improvement of the infrastructure, healthcare, transportation system etc. On the contrary if it refuses to oblige and falls back on the commitment of spending money on public it could result in reduction in popularity and tax collection. The example shows clearly that the government has the money available in its pool which could be wisely spent for every department and sector. This is evident from the above discussion that budgetary allocation should be done to all public sectors for facilitating general public. Secondly, depending on private companies and personnel to establish such important divisions i. e. medical, education etc. can create a monopoly and result in deprivation of these facilities for underprivileged people. For instance, the private owner will develop any of the hospitals for commercial purposes and the poor people won’t be able to afford that treatment. This example illustrates that the private people should not be given the sole responsibility to manage these core sectors. Thus, it can be seen that giving individual companies this major role could sabotage the lives of underserved people of the society. In a nutshell, the resources present with the state and cartel thinking of individuals should be kept in mind by the state authorities for developing or upgrading country. I do believe that the state should be completely responsible for building the basic necessities concerning their citizen life and health. I suppose, going another way round could complicate the problems for sitting government as private individuals could be involved in blackmailing in case their demands are not met.
Nowadays, the responsibilities of the
government
are
being debated
quite a lot by the
people
and human rights activists. The
state
role should
only
be limited
, restricted and confined
to
few
sectors
or it should cover every aspect of their
citizens
and residents’ well-being is a topic of great debate. It has
been argued
that the
government
should
only
be accountable for
developing country
’s military capabilities and infrastructure enhancement or it should be responsible for other
important
facilities
i. e.
education, medical, social protection
as well
. I
strongly
believe that all the aspects of life associated with
state
citizens
should be
directly
undertaken, developed, maintained and operated by the
state
authorities. This argument will
be proven
by taking into account availability of resources with
government
and monopoly by
private
entities and individuals.

Firstly
, the funds and financing available by the
state
is
substantially
high giving them the cushion to allocated funds and projects for every
sector
according to its requirements.
For instance
, the
state
collects the tax from its
citizens
on the reason and commitment that the taxpayer’s money will again
be spent
by
utilising
on the development and improvement of the infrastructure, healthcare, transportation system etc.
On the contrary
if it refuses to oblige and falls back on the commitment of spending money on public it could result in reduction in popularity and tax collection. The example
shows
clearly
that the
government
has the money available in its pool which could be
wisely
spent for every department and
sector
. This is evident from the above discussion that budgetary allocation should
be done
to all public
sectors
for facilitating
general public
.

Secondly
, depending on
private
companies
and personnel to establish such
important
divisions
i. e.
medical, education etc. can create a monopoly and result in deprivation of these facilities for underprivileged
people
.
For instance
, the
private
owner will develop any of the hospitals for commercial purposes and the poor
people
won’t be able to afford that treatment. This example illustrates that the
private
people
should not be
given
the sole responsibility to manage these core
sectors
.
Thus
, it can be
seen
that giving individual
companies
this major role could sabotage the
lives
of underserved
people
of the society.

In a nutshell, the resources present with the
state
and cartel thinking of individuals should be
kept
in mind by the
state
authorities for developing or upgrading country. I do believe that the
state
should be completely responsible for building the
basic necessities
concerning their
citizen
life and health. I suppose, going another way round could complicate the problems for sitting
government
as
private
individuals could
be involved
in blackmailing in
case their demands are not met.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc. ). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
445 words
6.0
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