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A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v. 3
The role of government has become a debatable issue. Some natives believe that the ministry should only provide services related to defence, infrastructure and electricity. However, other services should be given by other private companies. I think authority and private firms should joint their hands together for the development of the nation. This essay will discuss the reasons behind such need with some feasible conclusion. To begin with, The revenue of government mainly comprises tax money so it is quite difficult for the authority to allocate funds on all sectors with the need of the natives. I think power should allocate money on defence and infrastructure because both sectors are vital for the security and development of the country. If ministry spent money on defence, then they would be able to protect the country from enemies like terrorist attack, war etc. At the same time, funding in infrastructure helps to raise the economy and also promote international business. Therefore, some private companies should come forward to provide services to the community. Moreover, these firms help to upgrade the nations with new technology and bring advancement in all sectors. For example, there are many private institutions and hospitals in India which serve the public with the latest development like smart classes and new technology to curb major diseases like cancer, heart attack etc. Hence, this will not only enhance the economic growth, but also helps to curb major concerns of the nations like unemployment, health issues, poverty and so on. In conclusion, no doubt authority is obliged to serve the country through services. It is also suggested that private companies and society as a whole come forward for the well being of the nation.
The role of
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government
has become a debatable issue.
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Some
natives believe that the ministry should
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only
provide
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services
related to
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defence
, infrastructure and electricity.
However
, other
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services
should be
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given
by other
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private
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companies
. I
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think
authority and
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private
firms should joint their hands together for the development of the
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nation
. This essay will discuss the reasons behind such need with
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some
feasible conclusion.

To
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begin
with, The revenue of
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government
mainly
comprises tax money
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so
it is quite difficult for the authority to allocate funds on all sectors with the need of the natives. I
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think
power should allocate money on
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defence
and infrastructure
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because
both sectors are vital for the security and development of the country. If ministry spent money on
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defence
, then they would be able to protect the country from enemies like terrorist attack, war etc. At the same time, funding in infrastructure
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helps
to raise the economy and
also
promote international business.
Therefore
,
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some
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private
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companies
should
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come
forward to provide
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services
to the community.

Moreover
, these firms
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help
to upgrade the
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nations
with new technology and bring advancement in all sectors.
For example
, there are
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many
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private
institutions and hospitals in India which serve the public with the latest development like smart classes and new technology to curb major diseases like cancer, heart attack etc.
Hence
, this will not
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only
enhance the economic growth,
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but
also
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helps
to curb major concerns of the
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nations
like unemployment, health issues, poverty and
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so
on.

In conclusion
, no doubt authority
is obliged
to serve the country through
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services
. It is
also
suggested that
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private
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companies
and society as a whole
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come
forward for the
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well being
of the
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nation
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
8.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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