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Do you think that school newspaper should be given the absolute free speech with no censorship from faculty advisors? v.1

Do you think that school newspaper should be given the absolute free speech with no censorship from faculty advisors? v. 1
Censorship of school newspapers invites controversies across the world in this modern era. Though many people voice the opinion against the faculty editing in student newsletters, my two cents is teachers’ censorship of school newspaper is a healthy practice. One of the obvious reasons is that student's opinions are amateur, on many occasions, and it might convey the wrong message to other students. To be more precise, school pupils are vulnerable to what they see and hear. If an inappropriate message is conveyed to them, that will cause serious consequences among them. Furthermore, if students get these wrong or biased messages regularly the whole society will be affected drastically as they are going to drive the society in the future. So, a matured faculty monitoring the content and authenticity of school newspapers would be a far better alternative. Apart from that, the faculty advisors can help to hit the nail on the head about any controversial issues and which will bear better fruit. The recent court order in the United States regarding a school newspaper issue crystal cleared that faculty supervision in student newsletter articles is the best epitome. Another reason to support my opinion is that the school newspaper under the scanner of a faculty brings about the substantial reduction of legal issues. In other words, many student opinions, such as about alcoholism and teenage pregnancy are against the national law and order and that may cause communal unrests. A teacher's opinion before publishing those opinions immensely help to avoid potential legal problems. Needless to say, student's opinions about any issues get huge public attention if it is published without wild and woolly. Teachers headed editorial body rose lots of valuable opinions through the students' magazine without harming legal system of the country among Japanese schools are best examples. Newspapers and magazines in school need teacher’s supervision not only to avoid controversy but also to improve the overall quality of the content. However, an army of the people claims that the faculty involvement in students’ creativity is unethical. Perhaps it may true to some extent but while viewed in a large picture it is related to students’ safety and learning, clip the wing is justifiable. Put it in a nutshell, faculty involvement in school magazine helps to channel students’ talent in a healthy way.   Necessary censorship brings about to blow many issues and put forward excellent solutions to combat many social problems in a healthy manner. On top of that, an experienced helping hand supports the students to pump new ideas to society without breaching the laws.
Censorship of
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newspapers
invites controversies across the world in this modern era. Though
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many
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people
voice the
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opinion
against the faculty editing in
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student
newsletters, my two cents is teachers’ censorship of
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school
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newspaper
is a healthy practice.

One of the obvious reasons is that student's
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opinions
are amateur, on
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many
occasions, and it might convey the
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wrong
message to other
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students
. To be more precise,
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school
pupils are vulnerable to what they
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see
and hear. If an inappropriate message
is conveyed
to them, that will cause serious
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consequences among
them.
Furthermore
, if
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students
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get
these
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wrong
or biased messages
regularly
the whole society will be
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affected
drastically
as they are going to drive the society in the future.
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So
, a matured faculty monitoring the content and authenticity of
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school
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newspapers
would be a far better alternative. Apart from that, the faculty advisors can
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help
to hit the nail on the head about any controversial
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issues
and which will bear better fruit. The recent court order in the United States regarding a
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school
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newspaper
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issue
crystal cleared that faculty supervision in
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student
newsletter articles is the best epitome.

Another reason to support my
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opinion
is that the
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school
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newspaper
under the scanner of a faculty brings about the substantial reduction of legal
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issues
.
In other words
,
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many
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student
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opinions
, such as about alcoholism and teenage pregnancy are against the national law and order and that may cause communal
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unrests
. A teacher's
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opinion
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before
publishing those
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opinions
immensely
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help
to avoid potential legal problems. Needless to say, student's
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opinions
about any
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issues
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get
huge public attention if it
is published
without wild and
woolly
. Teachers headed editorial body rose lots of valuable
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opinions
through the students' magazine without harming legal system of the country among Japanese
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schools
are best examples.
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Newspapers
and magazines in
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school
need teacher’s supervision not
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only
to avoid controversy
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also
to
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improve
the
overall
quality of the content.

However
, an army of the
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people
claims that the faculty involvement in
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students’
creativity is unethical. Perhaps it may true to
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some
extent
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but
while viewed in a large picture it
is related
to
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students’
safety and learning, clip the wing is justifiable.

Put it in a nutshell, faculty involvement in
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school
magazine
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helps
to channel
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students’
talent
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in a healthy way
.
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Necessary censorship brings about to blow
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many
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issues
and put forward excellent solutions to combat
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many
social problems
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in a healthy manner
.
On top of that
, an experienced helping hand supports the
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students
to pump new
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ideas
to society without breaching the laws.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Do you think that school newspaper should be given the absolute free speech with no censorship from faculty advisors? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
429 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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