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A friend has agreed to stay in your flat (apartment) and look after it while you are away. You want to give your friend some information about the flat. Write a letter to this freind. In your letter: Give information about the flatProvide any important in v.2

A friend has agreed to stay in your flat (apartment) and look after it while you are away. You want to give your friend some information about the flat. Write a letter to this freind. In your letter: Give information about the flatProvide any important in v. 2
There are different entertainment ways from which people can spend their free time, among them, television is one of them. Some believe that people watching this for passing their free time and sometimes it dominates too. While, others argue that it separates them from their families and society and also make them dull. In my point of view, I agree with the propose statement. Nowadays, people mainly watching television for their entertainment purpose, however by doing this they not only kill the pace, also makes them lethargic in the competitive world. Commonly it seems that people who view television become addicted to it, additionally arise addiction create distance from the closest one. For example, if a person watching TV on a regular basis and same things repeat every day, then they become addicted to it and this addiction makes them alone from their family. They don’t care for their family, even though, sometime they cannot even find in emergency situations when their family badly needs him/her. Furthermore, People who frequently watch TV, gradually lose their focus from work. That person faces difficulties while doing essential official work. Lack of concentration he/she might be made a lot of mistakes and sometimes they lose their jobs. Beside, People receive no respect who does nothing or losing job or keep distance from society. Lastly, psychologically affected them a lot and it not only affects that person, but also hampered regular life of families. However, watching television is not always a bad thing. It has some beneficial side too. Many informative programs like geographical programs, educational programs or some informational program telecast in channels. So viewing it is not bad, but watching it for a long period is a bad thing. In conclusion, we can say that, people cannot do work every time, they need some recreation and rest and to do so they watch TV as their recreational medium. It is good to see that, but it should be limited and better to watch some informative and educational program so that it can motivate him to become active one not the lazy one.
There are
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different
entertainment ways from which
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people
can spend their free time, among them,
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television
is one of them.
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Some
believe that
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people
watching this for passing their free time and
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sometimes
it dominates too. While, others argue that it separates them from their
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families
and society and
also
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make
them dull. In my point of view, I
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agree
with
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'propose' is correct. If 'propose' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the propose
statement.

Nowadays,
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people
mainly
watching
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television
for their entertainment purpose,
however
by doing this they not
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only
kill the pace,
also
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makes
them lethargic in the competitive world.
Commonly
it seems that
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people
who view
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television
become addicted to it,
additionally
arise addiction create distance from the closest one.
For example
, if a person watching TV on a regular basis and same things repeat every day, then they become addicted to it and this addiction
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makes
them alone from their
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family
. They don’t care for their
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family
,
even though
, sometime they cannot even find in emergency situations when their
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family
badly
needs him/her.

Furthermore
,
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People
who
frequently
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watch
TV,
gradually
lose their focus from work. That person faces difficulties while doing essential official work. Lack of concentration he/she might
be made
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a lot of
mistakes and
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sometimes
they lose their jobs. Beside,
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People
receive no respect who does nothing or losing job or
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keep
distance from society.
Lastly
,
psychologically
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affected
them a lot and it not
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only
affects that person,
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but
also
hampered regular life of families.

However
, watching
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television
is not always a
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bad
thing. It has
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some
beneficial side too.
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Many
informative
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programs
like geographical
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programs
, educational
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programs
or
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some
informational
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program
telecast in channels.
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So
viewing it is not
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bad
,
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but
watching it for a long period is a
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bad
thing.

In conclusion
, we can say that,
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people
cannot do work every time, they need
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some
recreation and rest and to do
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so
they
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watch
TV as their recreational medium. It is
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good
to
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see
that,
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but
it should
be limited
and better to
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watch
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some
informative and educational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
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so
that it can motivate him to become active one not the lazy one.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay A friend has agreed to stay in your flat (apartment) and look after it while you are away. You want to give your friend some information about the flat. Write a letter to this freind. In your letter: Give information about the flatProvide any important in v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
350 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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