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You have received a letter about winning a prize in a competition organised by the media house, but didn’t receive that prize. Write a letter to the editor of a newspaper about it and say– Describe the competition and prize in details. – How do you f v.1

You have received a letter about winning a prize in a competition organised by the media house, but didn’t receive that prize. Write a letter to the editor of a newspaper about it and say– Describe the competition and prize in details. – How do you f v. 1
Nowadays, with globalisation, people can buy items which were once available only in a small number of countries. In some ways, it can be seen that countries have become increasingly similar. Personally, I think that this is a good development in many respects and I will explain why. Firstly, globalisation has a good impact because it allows people to acquire things which otherwise would have been impossible to buy. Indeed, many countries have progressed due to this. For instance, in Mauritius, cars are imported mainly from Japan and Germany. This has enabled many Mauritians to buy cars, which is an important aspect of a comfortable life. Moreover, these days there are many online websites such as AliExpress and Amazon where practically anything from abroad can be bought, and this gives many e-shoppers a sense of satisfaction since they are able to possess quality products from many important brands of especially western countries. Furthermore, buying from countries abroad eventually means that the population are adopting different modes of living such as the way they dress, the different types of housing structures, among others. It should be noted that these days, even furnitures can be bought from the other end of the world; many companies sell their ready-made kitchen sets outside their country. Thus, dreams of many people are being fulfilled. Additionally, with this facility of buying from other countries without the need to travel is an advantage for many people. Admittedly, I acknowledge the fact that many people might say that there is a loss of local culture from globalisation. However, this is a minor inconvenience which originates more from mass media. In conclusion, I firmly believe that globalisation is a positive development for a country because it allows its citizens to explore more of the outer world while staying in their home. It also allows the country to boost its economy because of many imported goods in which the government puts taxes.
Nowadays, with
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,
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people
can
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buy
items which were once available
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small
number of
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countries
. In
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some
ways, it can be
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seen
that
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countries
have become
increasingly
similar.
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, I
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think
that this is a
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good
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explain
why.

Firstly
,
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globalisation
has a
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good
impact
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because
it
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allows
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people
to acquire things which
otherwise
would have been impossible to
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buy
.
Indeed
,
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many
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countries
have progressed due to this.
For instance
, in Mauritius, cars
are imported
mainly
from Japan and Germany. This has enabled
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many
Mauritians to
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buy
cars, which is an
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important
aspect of a comfortable life.
Moreover
, these days there are
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many
online websites such as AliExpress and Amazon where
practically
anything from abroad can be
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bought
, and this gives
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many
e-shoppers a sense of satisfaction since they are able to possess quality products from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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important
brands of
especially
western countries.

Furthermore
, buying from
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countries
abroad
eventually
means that the population are adopting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
modes of living such as the way they dress, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
types of housing structures, among others. It should
be noted
that these days, even
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furnitures can
be
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bought
from the other
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end
of the world;
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many
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companies
sell their ready-made kitchen sets outside their
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country
.
Thus
, dreams of
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many
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people
are
being fulfilled
.
Additionally
, with this facility of buying from other
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countries
without the need to travel is an advantage for
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many
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people
.

Admittedly
, I acknowledge the fact that
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many
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people
might say that there is a loss of local culture from
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globalisation
.
However
, this is a minor inconvenience which originates more from mass media.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that
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globalisation
is a
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positive
development for a
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country
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because
it
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allows
its citizens to explore more of the outer world while staying in their home. It
also
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allows
the
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country
to boost its economy
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because
of
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many
imported
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goods
in which the
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government
puts taxes.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You have received a letter about winning a prize in a competition organised by the media house, but didn’t receive that prize. Write a letter to the editor of a newspaper about it and say– Describe the competition and prize in details. – How do you f v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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